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February 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Soooo need chapter 3!!! Poor Harry!!!
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February 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
this is very interesting.
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January 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i am interested in more. please update. the irony of golden boy. Ginny bashing, i love those!
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February 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I want more! I NEED more! :( please update soon
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October 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
gimmie more gimmie more!!!
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October 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
More please. I am intrigued by the idea that the Potter's would take Scorpius in after Draco leaves. I also would like to definitely know what made Draco disappear.
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October 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm, sounds very intersting so far, all though there are a few things that I'd like to bring up, seeing as how this is a review :3
The first is simply punctuation, and I think you may want to work on it. It's really not that bad, to be honest, but it is noticeable. Don't forget apostraphes as well. (Ex. Masters would be Master's)
The only other thing is that Ginny was a little two dimensional and the boy's opinion of her is a little... unlikely. I know that it's only the first chapter and a lot of the character development is still to come, but I think it's important that characters still seem realistic from the very beginning. (I'm not a huge Ginny/Harry fan, so I have no problem with her actually signing those papers and disappearing forever, though xD)
I know it seems like I didn't like your first chapter, but that's not true at all. I think it sounds very interseting and I'm definitley going to be keeping up with it. It's got an interesting twist to it. I just figure that reviewing doesn't mean random gushing, it means actually giving a review and helping out a little, yeah? So that's that. Great job, can't wait for more ^^
The first is simply punctuation, and I think you may want to work on it. It's really not that bad, to be honest, but it is noticeable. Don't forget apostraphes as well. (Ex. Masters would be Master's)
The only other thing is that Ginny was a little two dimensional and the boy's opinion of her is a little... unlikely. I know that it's only the first chapter and a lot of the character development is still to come, but I think it's important that characters still seem realistic from the very beginning. (I'm not a huge Ginny/Harry fan, so I have no problem with her actually signing those papers and disappearing forever, though xD)
I know it seems like I didn't like your first chapter, but that's not true at all. I think it sounds very interseting and I'm definitley going to be keeping up with it. It's got an interesting twist to it. I just figure that reviewing doesn't mean random gushing, it means actually giving a review and helping out a little, yeah? So that's that. Great job, can't wait for more ^^
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October 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OHh wow,I like it so far. Its well written,and interesting.
Hope the next chapter comes soon, cant wait to hear-well read what happens next.
Hope the next chapter comes soon, cant wait to hear-well read what happens next.
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October 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like this...please update soon!
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October 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Who has him? How did this happen? I sooo need chapter 2!