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October 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE IT! Great job! And Happy Birthday! I hope you get what you want! :D
Oh, thing about your writing I noticed... When a character is talking to someone there has to be a comma, for example: "Hermione by the lake!" Harry yelled. Harry is talking about Hermione in that sentence, but if I add a comma: "Hermione, by the lake!" Harry yelled. Now Harry is talking to Hermione. Without the comma the whole meaning of the sentence changes. I noticed that when you have someone talking to someone else, you don't have the comma, so grammatically, they are talking about them, not to them. I hope that made sense. Anyway, I can't wait to read more from you!
Oh, thing about your writing I noticed... When a character is talking to someone there has to be a comma, for example: "Hermione by the lake!" Harry yelled. Harry is talking about Hermione in that sentence, but if I add a comma: "Hermione, by the lake!" Harry yelled. Now Harry is talking to Hermione. Without the comma the whole meaning of the sentence changes. I noticed that when you have someone talking to someone else, you don't have the comma, so grammatically, they are talking about them, not to them. I hope that made sense. Anyway, I can't wait to read more from you!
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October 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love reading your stories, always hot!!!
Oh, and have a Happy Birthday!!!
Oh, and have a Happy Birthday!!!