rate_review Reviews

Hi ReiRei,
CONGRATULATIONS!!!(reader pays out a round of butterbeer to the great author)So you have finished your first story.(firework display+fanfares in the background)I must tell you that it is one of the best stories I've ever read.(it is in competition for the first place in my top ten list together with "Hogwarts Malestrom",maybe you know the author of this one.grinning)
Ahem!(reader's blushing)I've got a great favour to ask of you(only if you're interested)You know I've already thought a long time about writing my own story,but my problem is that though I am polyglot (German,English,French,Latin and of course Luxembourgish)I do not think I will be able to devellop my own plot into a coherent story in a language that is not my native one.When I read your story,I directly thought that maybe you would be ineterested in international "fame".I am member of a German Rickman-Snape fan-site and I would like to ask you to give me the honour of translating your great story into German.Naturally you would get full credit of the story as I would only be the translater.You also would get your own specially designed disclaimer.(something like:The Harry Potter Universe has been created by JKR...
No money is made of this.The plot and the unrecognized characters belong to the amazing fanfiction author ReiRei.I-Sureves Epans- am just providing the translation to this wonderful story...)Naturally I would also translate the reviews (and there are busy reviewers on this site)for you.If by any means you would be interested and need further information,please contact me by sending an email to nezifr@pt.lu LOL Sureves Epans PS:I can't wait for the epilogue to come...

I hope you continue writing. The story you created is very good, but unfortunately you didn't go to the small bother of having someone beta it for you. There weren't that many mistakes, but had those been corrected I could have rated this at 5. Consistent updates are just as welcome as fast ones, correct spelling and grammar are priceless!

I've just read chapter 42. Lucius is a bastard!!!!! I cannot believe he killed Draco, I'm wondering what effects the loa will have on Anise now and how everything will turn out for everyone. I've missed the updates on this, I've been on 12 hour shifts the last couple of days so have only managed to read the updates on hogwarts malestrom before I am needing to go to sleep!!! so sorry about that xax

chapter 43 was as you said really sad I thought maybe that the loa would go out of Anise's body in to Draco's I've never read a story were Draco died :(

Ok- you asked...receive
I can admit I didn't expect the death. However like all the others following this story I have
been waiting for you to update. Thankfully you gift your readers with quick updates. It has
been a pleasure reading as you spin your tale.

Execellent work I have throughly enjoyed this fic. I look forward to many more stories from you.

I'm not sure I can keep reading this story. You are switching verb tenses! Choose one: use present tense or past tense. When you use both it gives your readers a headache. I would recommend sticking to past tense. It is really difficult to write in present tense narratively. This isn't a flame; the story is good; I just can't follow it because of the verb confusion. Work it out and the story will be 100% better.

Hi ReiRei,
how nasty of you!You tell me (who still is under your imperius)to review before I go on to the next chapter and you make Draco succumb to an Adavra Kedavra and your spell keeps me from peeking on the next chapter.Me,the one that is always peeking to the last lines of love-books.So as this may be considered as a quick review I hope I may go on to the next chapter.Sureves Epans

Hi ReiRei,
umph your last semi-chapter,though not telling anything holds the promise that there is much more to come.Though Loa has the power to restore life(of the host she choses)she doesn't seem to have the possibility to keep her host from dying by mourning.As she is speaking to some other spirit maybe your intention is to get him back also.(maybe he can save Draco and incorporate him.)That would be fun:two wanton spirits haunting a couple of lovers.(means neverending smut...HiHi)I loved your coception of a semi-chapter.It's like the appatizer you get at the parties.They are so tasty,yet so small that you are overcome with desire for something stronger and more nutricious.( reader is dribbling at the thought of things yet to come...)LOL Sureves epans

I am sad that the story is over, but I am happy with the ending. I also have fallen in love with malestrom, in the Draco/Hermione section. I can't wait to see what you dole out next time.

You should put a epilogue about Hermione and them having the baby!