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Please, please don't kill Hermione! Please, please, please! I like your story very much

I really like this take on the Hermione-travels-backwards-in-time theme. It's really good storytelling, and thank you for sharing your creativity with the rest of us. A few technical pointers - you frequently switch tense, going from present tense (she shuts the door) to past tense (She said to Lily...). This makes the story a little hard to read. Also, remember that you usually don't use apostrophies on plural words. When you want to assign possession - "Hermione's wand" or "Lily's eyes" - then the apostrophe is correct. Otherwise, just stick an s on the end and call it a day. (I mean, ususally. English. Pain-in-the-ass language if there ever was one.)

Hope your workload is light tomorrow, too! Thanks again.

Cheers

CB

I just read all 16 chapters in about an hour and a half!! This is fantastic! I can't wait for an update

"Maybe" has become the most beautiful word in the world. pfft, of course GOD is gonna tell me to hav faith. every time i review i feel like a petulant child begging her mommy for sweets. me: i want that one. god rei: here hav this one. me again: I WAAANT THAT ONE!! god rei: well this is what ur getting. then i stomp my feet, stick out my tongue, and run off to sulk. there the determined, fast thinkin' mione i luv. yay! so thats how lily and james happen. phew, i thought they would never get there. and wat anise up too? is draco still unconscious? boy is he gonna b pissy. and frank is still forgotten in the lake, poor chap. ahh sev, y do i alway go for the crazies? i want my mione happy, and seeing as her happiness is dependent on snape he better shape up. OR FACE THE WRATH OF GOD'S CHILD BRAT!! WMAHAHA! >;p

This is Love At First Read! I heart you and your yummy, sneaky, brilliant little muse!!

STUPID GODS! DAMN YOU STARS! CAN'T GIVE AN INCH OF WIGGLE ROOM! this certainly cleared things up. are there no more surprises now? things will be exactly the same now and forever?! snape spends the rest of his life repentant and pining away for mione; which is that much more excruiating b/c, for years, she's right in front of him. were her plans of faking her death and saving sev's future always meant to fail? yes according to most recent information. can't she at least make a pensive(penseeve? u kno wat i mean right?) and have sev give it to her in lets say her fifth or forth year? come on mione, u always think of sumthin'! and god damn u give her an inch! bloody blasted high powers! >:[ (ps: your chaps r becoming pleasantly lengthier)

ack! im dying here...please please update soon. what was severus thinking kissing lilly

I like it. Please update soon.

OooOO! I love how things are heating up! :D What a good trick with the stuff in the punch. :D

To be honest, I am not sure I like this story. I love the Hermione/Severus pairing, but I have grown steadily more and more tired of the stories based on how much hell and torture Severus can put Hermione through and then Hermione still loves and forgives him because "he looooves her" in the end and that makes everything all rigth, the tunes of abused women all over the world. I will read a chapter or two more thoug, with the wain hope that Severus really must pay a price of immence hurt for his treatment and betrayal of Hermione. I don't have high hopes, this stories are usually very predictable, but I am not so far gone yet that I have lost all hope that this fic will be different.
You write very well, that makes it a pleassure to read you story. Bad writing can ruin the best of plots while good writing can make me read a story I otherwise would not have read. Update soon, and hopefully with a chapter or two that changes Hermione from being a patetic victem for Severus cruelty and into the strong, brave, knowing the difference between what is rigth and wrong, Hermione I like and belive in. At the moment I am not to fond of Severus, he is more a Death Eater coward and whore than a man any woman with a unce of self respect and/or two braincells would want, so if you let him die a horribel death, knowing that he brougth it all on him self with his cowardness, it would suit me just fine. (I do actually love Severus, but I love him as the snarky, cold, honourable, magnificient Potions Master, Spy and hero. You present him quite different from that image, I would never have minded JKR killing of the man you write about, probably would have said it was long overdue, while I am still miffed that JKR killed "my" Severus)