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for Harry Potter and the Royal Veela

by SevenSword

schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
please update soon I want to know if Harry is going to give in for Drac, or if stupid Ron (I realy dislike him especily after the epsode with Harry) is going to get in the way
person Saigo
schedule September 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
""Dobby will not let Draco Malfoy hurt Harry Potter!" Came a shrill; unexpected cry from the other side of the counter, followed by various cooking utensils."

GO Dobby!! Hahaha! I'm always reading fics where Harry gets attacked at Hogwarts or something and I'm always wondering where the heck Dobby is while Harry's getting attacked. Helpless!Harry is fun sometimes but I've always wanted to read a veela fic where he's guarded like the crown jewels and pretty dangerous in his own right. So this is just awesome.
person Saigo
schedule September 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really really really enjoy the way each character thinks and reacts so distinctly. There's no 'group collective' where they all think the same and agree on everything. There's individuality, everyone is perceiving what's going on differently and reacting differently. There are misunderstandings and conflict and good logic that isn't so great in practice and a bit of human irrationality that comes from thinking with your heart and not your brain.

Its such a subtle thing but its very hard to find in most stories.
schedule September 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i still love that ron's dad did it XD

~eros
person Lumcer
schedule September 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Still as good as the last time I reviewed. I hope there is more to come and VERY soon! it's getting interesting!

KCK-Lumcer
person Anon
schedule September 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
love this story. They need to stop taking it down!!!
person Sarah
schedule September 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Where did the story go? lol
person Darkless
schedule September 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well, you know you can't leave it hanging there. Get on with the next chapter please...hai aku, onegai!

Constructive critisizm: Great story, fun interactions and situations, but your grammer and punctuation skills are on the poor side and need work. Still, it's easy to read in spite of the errors. Polishing it up with proper corrections would only make it better. Also, please refrain from extra-long *** lines that make the words stretch longer than the window can accomodate.

Thank you, and please hurry! :)
person Jan
schedule September 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I might not be to happy with Ron for betraying Harry with his secret, but I'm proud that he didn't snitch on Harry to Lucius even though Lucius still got the info he was after... but he still doesn't know where Harry is yet ^_~

please update chapter 30 soon ^_^

Jan
person romanticfae
schedule September 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
love it great chater