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for Just Pretend

by unknown001397

person luvhp
schedule November 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm so sorry, but the grammatical errors in this have me scratching my head. It's very confusing trying to understand what is going on.
schedule October 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like it. Please update soon.
person luvhp
schedule October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good chapter,a lthough there were alot of grammatical errors in this chapter for some reason.
Otherwise, WOW< what happened to Hermione??
person mhaj78
schedule October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
oh, so what did draco get hermione?! i can't wait to see!!!
person mhaj78
schedule October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
okay yikes! can't wait to hear about what was going through his head as he watched that--lots of people freeze up in emergency situations like that...
schedule October 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
your story has great promise...i like the idea of it and i am looking forward to seeing where it is going...i think that you need a beta though...your grammar is a bit off and there are some spelling errors. don't let this upset you, the story itself is still great, and a beta can only make it better.
schedule October 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
good chapter...i like the pink hair at the end...the kissing scenes were great, i can imagine what everyone around hogwarts is thinking with those two making out...poor ron, he got what he deserved, didn't he?
schedule October 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
oooh...naked hermione...what will draco do next?
schedule October 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
poor draco is smitten and hermioine is not sure of her feelings...good chapter...i liked the sex scene...at least the one sided sex scene, lol
person mhaj78
schedule October 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
thanks for the update! :)

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