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for Play Girl's Star

by KraeHi

schedule February 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Sooo need chapter 4!!!
person Leentjef
schedule February 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
keep going and post soon
bye bye
schedule February 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This looks to be a promising story. However, it needs cleaned up a bit. Several paragraphs have broken english or mis-spelled words. A Beta would be a help to have. If you want this DH compliant, you need Kingsley as the minister as Rufus Scrimgeour died in DH and Kingsley was made minister after the final battle. By reading it, it sounds like you were trying to describe the final battle in DH? Also, Harry left for the tower with his friends before anything was done to any of the remaining death eaters in the great hall as I read it in DH.

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MightyGryffindor
schedule February 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
more please!
schedule October 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Fantastic chapter! Sooo need chapter 4!
schedule September 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Interesting beginning! Sooo need chapter 3!
schedule September 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
awe poor ddraco, its a gooood story!
schedule September 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like the story and please update soon.