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September 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Loved this, but I am kind of confused. I wish I could figure out what happened and why Harry doesn't remember a party. I know you will clear all that up soon enough. Keep up the great work.
Kat
Kat
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September 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
more please!!
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September 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well, I am confused also, please...update soon!
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September 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ch 1: Interesting idea, but it is a little choppy - the sections or scenes don't really seem complete before moving on to the next.
This might be in part due to the mechanics. The one that jarred the most was during Harry's conversation with Dumbledore. D said, "... many has left home". This might work better as, "... many have left for home...". Sometimes, using spell check and reading the screen, its too easy to get lost in the words. I find reading the text out loud really helps catch missing words, correctly spelled words that are wrong for the context, etc.
Good luck.
This might be in part due to the mechanics. The one that jarred the most was during Harry's conversation with Dumbledore. D said, "... many has left home". This might work better as, "... many have left for home...". Sometimes, using spell check and reading the screen, its too easy to get lost in the words. I find reading the text out loud really helps catch missing words, correctly spelled words that are wrong for the context, etc.
Good luck.
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September 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Interesting. Can't wait for chapter 2!