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by Extraho

person El
schedule October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like it ^_^
A bit underdeveloped, as far as conflict, but an enjoyable read nevertheless. My advice would be to make sure you insert some struggle, beyond Ginny's girly attempts to keep Harry, and make them harder to resolve. It's a bit too easy for him right now, one author to another. Still, tons of potential here ^_^
schedule October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I have to say your story is a little bit fast. I understand that some people know about him (that he is a Malfoy) but to jump a relationship with his father that is too much. And what about his mother? Isnt she crazy because Lily took him away from her when he was just born?

Sirius is nothing great. I would have liked more if it was Sirius/Lucius. That would be great. I mean that Draco could be really Sirius son afterall you mentioned that Lucius is not angry at Draco for his pregnancy.

Sorry for the flames but I really like your story and I am not even sure if you read our reviews.
person Amee
schedule October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
YESSSSSSSS!!! GO SIRIUS!!!!!
-cough- excuse me. Wonderful chapter! I was so worried that Draco was going to be with Severus. (I love Sev and all but he is used too much) I can't wait for the next chapter!!!
person kcgx23
schedule October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Now that was a pairing I didn't see coming, fabulous chapter. I look forward to more.
schedule October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
YES!!! I Was Hoping that Sirius was Draco's lover!!

PLEASEEE Let Sirius, Remus, and Tonks go to the dark side... I would LOVE that, and Tonks would be Awesome as a dark witch/Spy. ^.^
person Wilder
schedule October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i knew the baby would be fine and i guessed that it was either sirius or a weasley... another good chapter, you are bring up some interesting ideas
person wump615
schedule October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like that it was Sirius, but if that baby is really gone I'm getting my torches and pitch fork out of storage.
person goldenslumbers
schedule October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh oh oh!! I had no clue it was going to be Sirius, but I'm so glad it is! Yay for Sirius/Draco sex! And poor Draco's baby! I really love how totally different this story is!
person Spacious
schedule October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It was awesome that was a really shocking but to say the least ive been dieing for your knew harry potter page
person xhedwigx
schedule October 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
So neat, bloody wicked,& me likes it update soon pleassssssssse