rate_review Reviews

intriuging. I like it so far, you should update soon.

i am interested but your format is all wrong. I it all smooshed together without enough double spacing between paragraphs. On aff you have to double or triple indent between paragraphs to make it stick. just sinlge indenting doesn't do anything. So if you want many people to like and read your fic and review then take the time to check your format after posting. Huge endless paragraphs are useless and not fun to read.
otherwise the ideal for this fic is ok.

*squeee*a next chapter definitely needed...i love it!

so hottt!

Oh sooo need chapter 2! Kind of hard to read with no spacing up otherwise I liked it!

Great start!! More please!!