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December 5, 2012 at 12:00 AM
hmm...this one is a little weak. Perhaps make characters a bit more believable and develop the back story?
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March 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That's it? It's over just like that.
This was written beautifully, if not grammatically(sp?) correct.
Maybe run it thorugh a beta and update it, some parts were hard to skim over as the sentence didn't quite make senses.
Otherwise, Wonderful story!
This was written beautifully, if not grammatically(sp?) correct.
Maybe run it thorugh a beta and update it, some parts were hard to skim over as the sentence didn't quite make senses.
Otherwise, Wonderful story!
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December 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
On the First part of the story:
Ooh that's nice.
Very Light and re-freshening. It makes me want to float. HA!
On the very recent Chapter:
What's going to happen now? :S Ooh. I just have no clue. No clue at all.
And that's a good thing.
You will update right?
Verie
P.S. Happy Holidays!
Ooh that's nice.
Very Light and re-freshening. It makes me want to float. HA!
On the very recent Chapter:
What's going to happen now? :S Ooh. I just have no clue. No clue at all.
And that's a good thing.
You will update right?
Verie
P.S. Happy Holidays!
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December 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
nice!
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December 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Was that the end of the story?
I hope not. Its sweet, adorably sweet.
It makes me smile in a silly way. Ha!
You are going to put more chapters right? :)
I hope not. Its sweet, adorably sweet.
It makes me smile in a silly way. Ha!
You are going to put more chapters right? :)
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September 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It's very cute.
I'm no good around cute. Look, I'm blushing!!! *hides under the bed* Funny how I'm better with smut than cute...
Oh, this didn't mean I didn't like it. I did. Very. I just felt like hiding under my bed, see?
Waiting for update. ;)
Love,
~Kitty
I'm no good around cute. Look, I'm blushing!!! *hides under the bed* Funny how I'm better with smut than cute...
Oh, this didn't mean I didn't like it. I did. Very. I just felt like hiding under my bed, see?
Waiting for update. ;)
Love,
~Kitty
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August 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
so cute more please!
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August 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This sounds like a really good start to an excellent story and is written beautifully. Hope you update soon!!!
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August 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very nice
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August 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i like it, but you need to make the chapters a little longer.