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Faaaak!!! You MUST update thick fic!! Sexy and powerfully dark Snape is so friggin hot! So much possibility here its not even funny..

Oooooohhh, this has a lot of BDSM/Ds potential!!! You gotta take this the whole way. Super curious how it pans out..

This is seems to be good, hope you update soon.

Damn this is good for a first time story... I hope you keep on writing this one. it is getting real good so far.
I hope you keep up with this one

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

This chapter had me grinning from ear to ear. Great story, please update soon

You have improved on your imagery, keep trying to describe things it gives the reader insight. I read chapter 2 author's notes and went in and read all your reviews. Then I read ch one again. There were some puncuation errors, but it didn't effect the overall impact of your story. Most of your reviews were quite lovely. I suggest the following idea which you may accept or reject. Write out chapter three, save it in a file. Let it go for a day or two. Then open the file and read it fresh. During this time you can look for spelling errors, puncuation errors and look and see if you can describe things more clearly. Remember as a author you are painting a picture with words, always keep that in mind.
On a positve note this is not a moderated archive so you don't have to jump through alot of hoops. I think I may still have a beta site if you want a beta, or if you just want some advice feel free to contact me. I think your story has lots of potential and as a writer myself I'd like to help in any way I can.
Goodluck with ch three,
sinbad

For some reason (probably because I have a vivid imagination) the last part of chapter two really got to me and I had to fan myself. I can't wait to read what Hermione writes in her 'assignment'.

I haven't noticed any mistakes by the way... and i really liked that chappie, it was sooo small though...i wonder what hermione is going to write...

I like it. Please udpate soon.