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new reader here !!! loved this !!!!!! you need to hurt RON and not liking that Ginny girl either !!!!! love how Harry now has FAMILY !!!!!!!!!!! hope you update soon again and just don't forget it ok !!!!!

oh the plot thickens! you are really making this story convoluted!! lol I wonder where you will stop it? you are a great writer of tales, and a fabulous story teller. I look forward to reading the rest of the story...that is if you haven't quit on it. thank you for you and thank you for the sharing of yourself with others.

I love it the plot twists are tremendous and awe inspiring. Please update soon and Let me know when you do thanks :)

This is a really interesting story hope you write more.

Wow! I absolutely love this story. The concept behind it, and all the twists you've added just make it so great! I hope you finish the story. I can't wait to read how it all ends. Great job! :)

love it :D
update soon, pretty please :D

I hope there would be more to this story. However, you don't really need to use "nee" so much. If you'd explained it once in the story of who belongs to whom, we will remember. I am married and I don't use the term "nee" if anyone asks, I just simply tell them what my maiden name is.

Hermione's middle name is wrong in chapter 22, it's suppose to be "Jean" not "Jane".

Fairly amusing otherwise. But were 22 chapters in with no relationship progression, too much other stuff is happening too quickly for you to even get to their relationship. Just something to think about.

Hogwarts is in Scotland not England. Also you may want to work on things being said that are not necessary like when Harry was told That Lucius was going to have breakfast for him and he had replied that was good because he was hungry. You may want to find a beta to help you so that you can get a better handle on writing. You have several spelling and grammatical errors that almost caused me to dismiss this story it's only because the plot line intersted me and the story isn't ha;f bad that I actually continued past the first chapter.

I have decided that I need to answer a review. First, I know that Hogwarts is in Scotland. I have never said that it wasn't. I may have not written a sentence very well, but that sometimes happens as I tend to read and write a little differently than most people as I am dyslexic and see things a lot differently. If anyone ever has a question about something in my story, please ask. If anyone finds a mistake I may have missed in my many rereadings of my work, please share it. I tend to miss things.
Betas. I don't like the idea of a beta. I go over my stories all the time and fix anything that I find needs fixing. I have heard of a few stories about Betas that I don't want to happen to me. I am not saying that all betas are mean. I just like doing it myself. It makes things easier since I know what I am trying to say and what I want charaters to say.
If you read something that you think is pointless to the story, ask me about it and I will look it up and explain it. Like the mentioned sentence, where Harry says, 'Good, I am hungry'. I wrote it that way, because he was referring to the fact that Granger wasn't letting him to eat in the first place, just in not so many words.
I am not making anyone read this fic of mine. If you don't like something about it, then don't read it.