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Great idea- I love Hermione and Draco married- and some fine writing. But I would like to point out even seventeen year old boys can't cum ( I think you had Draco cumming six to eight time the first night together ) that many times in one night. Frankly you're pushing it at four and add on to that he is drunk! I'm sorry that's just entirely too unrealistic. The line between fantasy and unbelieveable is fine. The other complaint I have is the supposed size of Draco's equitment. A foot long? Again you're pushing the line. Other than that a great story that i've had a lot of fun reading.

I can't wait to see the boys reaction to him in their common room. I really enjoy reading this story.

Fantastic update! Poor Hermione! I'm glad she has Draco to care for her though. And hey, he even knew enough to go find her friends. I can't wait for more!

great!! i really like the door thing--that was cool! :) magonagal is totally awsome to give advise to draco! poor hermione i love that draco would go and get the others and i really love that he just held her to try and comforted her. i also love that he totally defended her at breakfast and that she herd some of it. :) i very much look forward to more and i do hope that it is soon it will help keep me sane during finals! :)

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If so..

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Hermione collapsed on the bed, staring up at the gauzy, cr

Blaise had been gifted with his mother

very very hot scene though It kind of annoyed me that those maids bothered them.....they knew they just had sex lol.

and got rid of those who they absolutely refused to invite, which was really only one person, Albus Dumbledore, who had gotten them into the mess in the first place.

aww thats not nice....its your fault you two were drunk..not his. lol







The only ones not affected were Ginny, Blaise, and Dumbledore, who had shown up despite not receiving an invitation (purposefully, of course). Ginny and Dumbledore beamed at them, while Blaise smiled haughtily, his own version of beaming.

lmfao im glad i was mad that they didn't invite him. haha
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Except, there it was, a smile from Mr. Weasley. A smile that said,