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Lovely, absolutely ravishing! Oh, it's moments like these you wished you were at hogwarts isn't it? ^.^ Can't wait for more.

Love it!!! Keep it coming!!

OMG! if only I could have been so lucky to have that kind of sex ed class with a dark handsome man! wow...

I like it. Please update soon.

well, we all knew it had to be in the near future, finially some action!!! (not that this story hasn't had me going since it started)..nice pic by the way my compliments to the artist!

I really enjoy stories where these two fall for each other and neither of them are really, quite are aware of it until later on. Can't wait for the next chapter, don't make us wait too long!

Just started reading, and this is Brilliant. I don't know how they'll make it to the end of the semester at the rate they're going... lust crazed fools, but I love it. Can't wait to see what happends next. :)

Brilliant! Update soon please! xoxo

How kitch. And totally expected, actually, with that whole falling asleep. -sighs- I'll be honest, I wasn't thrilled with this story at first, still don't think I am, however, it does intrigue me to the point of continuing to read it, so you must be doing something right. Maybe I'm sexually frustrated because my own works are being so stubborn, I don't know. You've written that particular scene very vividly, and the use of the doll is quite a new concept that in all the sex ed stories I've read, I don't think I've seen it come up. The Albus moment for me wasn't believable, it never is when they have Albus suggesting that it's alright for them to have relations. I'm alright with him being meddlesome, even doing his own things to help push them together, but he can never just come right out and say to Severus that he believes him and Miss Granger should whatever and if they do, he's alright with it. Albus can be alright with it, he just can't come out and say it. Also, I felt that you've led them into an awkward position. Thus far, as you've written the characters, there is going to be a very awkward happening when either of them wakes up, and I do hope that in your next chapter you don't just glaze over the fact that she fell asleep after their session of mutual masterbation and he pulled her into his arms. I think if you were going to put it in there, then it's significant to you, otherwise it's just awkward and doesn't fit the characters as you've played them up. I can imagine both would feel very out of their element waking up in that particular situation and I think as the readers, we need to see that awkward, out of placeness that could occur. The lesson seemed to progress too fast and Severus lost that subtlty that he'd had in these lessons up until that point. Once you brought her to the office we all knew what was coming, but I feel like you really could of given him that finess you'd done so well in applying to him in previous chapters, and really worked in that paced rhythm of the lessons as you'd done before. I know it's always intense and often comes out rushed when you finally get to the 'lemon' scene, however, this is one where you really should have taken the time to build it up, I think. The scene itself was vivid, very bright in language and description, though at the same time, a bit generic. I felt like there were moments where it could have been any two people on his sofa, (a sofa, which in the initial description of the office was not mentioned) and then there were also times when it was so specifically Severus and Hermione that you couldn't escape them. I think all moments of Sev/Mione stories should be that way, where the reader should never be able to feel like they could put any generic man/woman into those spots. I do like what you've done thus far, complaints aside, as it is a concept that's so overdone, yet you've managed to make something decent out of it. I do hope you spend some time really developing this next chapter as it promises to be a big, exciting, lemony combination. I'm sorry if you think I'm too critical, but I hope my criticism is constructive and helps you. Best of luck, keep it up and I'll be sure to keep reading.

~CC

AHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAAHAHAHAHHAHA *FALLSOVERLAUGHING* That was the best chapter in a long time. Finished it then went back to the chapter before, and re-read it and then re-read the new one. And it was funnier than the last time. FUCKME, MERLIN! XD That was great.... XD Im gonna be laughing about that alllll day long XD