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Love it! Please write more soon.

Great chapter as always, but since you said you wanted constructive criticism, here it goes: My one and only criticism is that you seem to change details from one chapter to the next. I guess you would call it a continuity problem. For example, is the Prince's middle child named Serendipity or Serenity? Earlier in the story it was Serenity. Another thing I noticed is that Toby said he watched Percy die in the final battle, but it seems that Hermione's rape occured after the final battle, so when did it actually happen? Lastly, In the chapter where Toby visits Molly and Arthur, Harry tells Snape that his infant son is named Brian James, and after Brian pees on him, Harry claims that Ginny told him that it would be easier with a boy, and that his sisters never christened him like that. In the latter chapters at the burrow, Brian wasn't the youngest and the Potters had no girls. Also, when did the lunch meeting at Hogwarts go from a simple meeting between the Princes and Molly and Arthur to the whole family going to the burrow? I know these are minor glitches, but I just wanted to point them out in case you want to fix them, or I could have read it wrong anyway, so you can ignore my criticism and my nagging little questions if you want to. I also know you have been going through hell, by the way, I am keeping your child in my prayers, and hope he receives that lung soon! I am also happy with whatever you give us in the way of chapters, and I also marvel that you take the time to do this, when you have other serious things going on, but I guess writing is therapy for you as it is for me. Lastly, I do love this story, and am looking forward to the next chapter!

Grace

Yea! I am glad you are adding chapters. Please continue!

I like it. Please update soon.

Another wonderful Chappy as always. I hope your son gets to feeling better soon!

My son has spent time in the hosptial it is torture.
I know how helpful it is to escape into your own mind.
I will keep a good thought. I hope to see more of the Princes.
Doodle

Hope everything is going ok. Please update soon.

Love the story! Please continute. Hope all is well.

It's so good to see you back :)

We will keep you and your family in our Prayers! Happy New Year!

--Sari

3 words...about damned time! Good chapter!!!! Great chapter!!!! Now, add more soon.