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elijah, my beta, I seemed to have lost your email. do you think I could have it again so I can email you my nexy chapter.

you were damn right about 'weirder' - in a beautifully sneaky, pureblooded slytherin kinda way!!! im all for porn without plot, but mixing kinky family sex with an underhanded plot of this magnitude... brilliant. the epilogue had me gaping like a goldfish at patricia's manipulatory magnificence. my only criticism is that there needs to be some sort of vague reference to patricia's goal in the first chapter, otherwise the plot comes off as 'making it up as i go' instead of 'yes, i the brilliant author, had this incredibly sneaky, totally unforseen plot twist all planned from the start.' i know from first hand experience the best of plot twists ARE by the seat of the pants, but thats no reason to let the reader know. i figured since you were editing and polishing in the first place, this is the only thing i could think of that would make this one of the best manipulative mindfucking one-shots ive ever read. very few OCs - male or female - can outwit the malfoys without coming off as contrived, but patricia did it wonderfully. massive kudos

Wow. Pretty intense. I really enjoyed the story. Can't wait for other stories from the illustrious elijah.

Hi, I'd be delighted if you'd beta my story, and, yes, I certainly enjoyed your's. I hope you haven't given up on it. Unfortunately, I cannot see your email. The story has been posted, unbeta'd, already. You can go onto my profile to look at it. Thank you so much.

Chapter 2: Short, but sweet. Not too sweet, of course. She is chained to a bed and basically a sex slave. Ah well. That's what you get for trying to wed a Malfoy. The only desirability in this situation is that she gets to copulate with Lucius Malfoy, which is definitely a plus! Please update soon.

Beautifully written. I enjoy your specific writing style. There's something about it that really resonates with me. Hopefully, you'll write some more Lucius/OFC stories; you have a gift.