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Applause! Good reading in preparation for the non-smut Deahly Hallows!

Just read it all. NOW COMPLETE IT! My life will have a hole in it if I cant read it all!

this story is awesome!!! UPDATE SOON!!!!!!

shit! ive been loking for this story for months, i read it a long time ago and then it was just gone. yay im so glad youve started writing it again! i really hope you finish it soon, i remember reviewing originaly when i read this that the first chapter or two had a 'fight club' kind of feel to it .. yaknow with his whole hand thing. i dont know, anyways. good to hear from you again! im too glad this story is back!

so glad you updated the story! please keep posting!!! this is one of the best original fics on this site ever!!!!

I love it!!! Update soon!!! Please?!

OH MY GOD!! I love this story!! I can't wait for the next chapter. Keep it up!!

Wow. wow. wow. I

OMG OMG I love you so much for updating this story. I have been waiting for this since forever and I had even given up hope that you would ever update but im sooooooooooooo glad you did.

...aaaaaand now it's become a bad story. I really liked chapters one through five (though the sex scenes were pretty repetitive and they acted oddly OOC in certain sections), but chapter six was when the illusion of the story broke down and I realized that it was just some person writing a fic, rather than a portrayal of things that actually happened (I know that sounds odd to say about a story featuring wizards, but I think you understand me). Ron's behavior is totally inappropriate and unrealistic: he's clingy, posessive, and confrontational. You try to have him toe the line between 'controlling ex-boyfriend' and 'concerned friend', but he comes off as strange and weird. It is obvious that he is designed to be a dramatic foil, a person who sets up conflict by giving Harry and Hermione a reason to be real hush-hush about their relation ship. Q: Why does Ron act like such an ass? A: Because The Plot Is A Beast That Must Be Fed. It's clear that the chain of events that you've plotted out requires an outside voice challenging Harry and Hermione's relationship, but you couldn't figure out who to give that voice to, and so have Ron act completely out of character and like an all-around jerk. Nice story and all, but with chapter six I no longer care about how everything ends.