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July 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Niiiice. Mail me when you update please?
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July 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Interesting chapter! I think I had more questions than answers. But maybe they have to do more with motivations or some kind of character insight? Like Hermione bleaching her hair and then using a spell to stop the roots from growing, was this because she knew she might get captured and be without her wand? Did she think a glamour charm would wear off (sort of like polyjuice) or that her captors would try to break any? It still leaves me wondering about her eyes, and facial features.
I guess the magic thing with Draco had me wondering the same thing, he killed with curses and potions, but used a machete...I guess he needed a more tangible connection to that death? Anyways it was interesting!
I guessed Fleur from the exchange in the alley, and you wrote that Harry was suspicious of her. I wouldn't be surprised if Molly was under the imperious!
I guess the magic thing with Draco had me wondering the same thing, he killed with curses and potions, but used a machete...I guess he needed a more tangible connection to that death? Anyways it was interesting!
I guessed Fleur from the exchange in the alley, and you wrote that Harry was suspicious of her. I wouldn't be surprised if Molly was under the imperious!
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July 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very nice little sex scene in there.
I hope Draco will come back okay,
I really feel bad for him.
His poor mother too,
She did nothing && the Death Eaters raped && killed her.
War is such a stupid thing, at least that's what I think.
I like the scene with the two of them flying too,
It was a good idea to show how they are without war && hate surrounding them.
Anywayss,
I'm going away for a few days,
So please, PLEASE have a new chapter ready for me when I get back :)
Much Love...
XXX
Xx-.k.a.y.y.-xX
I hope Draco will come back okay,
I really feel bad for him.
His poor mother too,
She did nothing && the Death Eaters raped && killed her.
War is such a stupid thing, at least that's what I think.
I like the scene with the two of them flying too,
It was a good idea to show how they are without war && hate surrounding them.
Anywayss,
I'm going away for a few days,
So please, PLEASE have a new chapter ready for me when I get back :)
Much Love...
XXX
Xx-.k.a.y.y.-xX
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July 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
lol i totally knew it was fluer!!!!! are the blackmailing her to get Bill the meds he needs??? that sucks lol
kepp updateing!!
kepp updateing!!
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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
just go to your panel
click edit story
then select your story, select edit details
and then just edit the story summary, you can just delete beast from there
click edit story
then select your story, select edit details
and then just edit the story summary, you can just delete beast from there
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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
@ ch5! You've got me hooked! I liked the imagery a lot and their little verbal exchange before entering the manor. Can't wait to find out happens next! I'm holding in my squee for the Hermione reveals herself chapter or Harry/Ron discover what the hell happened and who's responsible for it all chapter! ...I mean it seems like all hell will break loose, dead sister/wife and best friend gone on the lam with her murderer...darkness ahoy. XD
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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
@ ch6 now I'm curious as to whether she'll go or stay!
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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
that was really good!!!!!! So good!!!
I really like where this story is headings, it snot predictabel at all, irs very unique!
GET IT! lol
can't wait for your next installment
I really like where this story is headings, it snot predictabel at all, irs very unique!
GET IT! lol
can't wait for your next installment
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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
this story has a good amount of darkness, but i like the small amounts of sweetness which show through
its a good balance.
i really hope hermione will stick with draco, because he needs her
and i cannot wait for the day he finds out its her
and that was a very nice kiss, i really felt like you could feel some of the pain he was feeling
that he was pouring into her
its a good balance.
i really hope hermione will stick with draco, because he needs her
and i cannot wait for the day he finds out its her
and that was a very nice kiss, i really felt like you could feel some of the pain he was feeling
that he was pouring into her
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June 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
@ ch. 3 - wow, I'm really curious as to how he's going to come out of this downwards spiral, if he's even still spiraling that is, seems like he's hit rock bottom. I'm surprised Hermione hasn't more revulsion but maybe curiosity has her attention for the moment?
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He drew back the curtain and the red leaves reminded him of the blood that'd been spilled. He saw her face.
"Please no, no more." the girl whimpered.
He stared at her coldly. It was as if he weren't even in control of his body when he completed the task.
"Don't move to much, it only makes it hurt more."
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Ok...so dramatic yeah, but there's a set up, flashback, reality. There might be other ways but I tend to see this more often here.
Here's inner thoughts (bold or underlines used to stress words -and underlines could be used to list titles to books too, don't what else thought!lol):
"NOOOOOO" she screamed to herself "Not Ginny!"
HTH!
Here's how to format, follow everything listed in the link below and you'll have bold, italics, and underline. Be sure to watch where the backslash is, if it's behind the letter it makes everything after it bold, italics or underlined etc. when in fact your aiming to have it just the word between the formatting commands display bold, italics etc. It's really simple!
http://resource.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600005245
Oh also, for flashbacks I tend to see that most people set up the event and then use italics to portray the past. People also use italics for inner thoughts
So here's an example:
He drew back the curtain and the red leaves reminded him of the blood that'd been spilled. He saw her face.
"Please no, no more." the girl whimpered.
He stared at her coldly. It was as if he weren't even in control of his body when he completed the task.
"Don't move to much, it only makes it hurt more."
He let the curtains fall. No sense in remembering these things now, they were over and done.
Ok...so dramatic yeah, but there's a set up, flashback, reality. There might be other ways but I tend to see this more often here.
Here's inner thoughts (bold or underlines used to stress words -and underlines could be used to list titles to books too, don't what else thought!lol):
"NOOOOOO" she screamed to herself "Not Ginny!"
HTH!