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for Naked Without You

by nera

person Anon
schedule November 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
schedule September 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
one word...AWESOME
person Anon
schedule September 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Please add more chapters this is really good
person wudelfin
schedule August 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
raw powerful utterly insanely beautiful
schedule June 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i loved it so much!!!!
person Rosamund
schedule June 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I liked it! Any more? Please continue this!
schedule June 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
K, yeah, toni is it? You make me very happy. :)

Your writing style is... breathtaking. Your sentence structure builds tension and releases it so easily that it's almost not fair. Your tone is perfect. But listen to me, sweetie, you need to Beta this story. If you cleaned up those spelling errors, the whole piece would flow much better. And wow... that was the most depressing ending. It just... ended. It made me sad. I wanted there to be more to the story. What happened?

Don't get me wrong. I loved it. I mean it, I loved it. If you want, you can send the story to my email account and I'll clean it right up for you (absumoaevum@gmail.com).

Salaam,
TooMuch