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Daphne Greengrass,
Susan Bones,
Hannah Abbot(Only if really shy),
Parvati Patil,
Padma Patil, (Definatly the twins)
Pansy Parkinson (unsure about her)

Love your story so far update soon

Angelina Johnson (black females are woefully under-represented in HP fiction, so I say why not her? -Black family- females, on the other hand, are vastly -over-represented- in these sorts of fics. You've already got Tonks, please please please no Black sisters. Done to -death-)

Padma Patil (I'm very much against the idea of doing both twins, personally. In fact, I think Parvati should actively attempt to "rescue" Padma (perhaps for some matter related to Hinuism, or just cause they're sisters). The role reversal alone would be interesting, Parvati is always the gossipy sorta skank friend of gossipy skank Lavender (in fandom at any rate)... here it would be her brainy sister (Padma) who's relegated to a sexual object and her (Parv) who's uncovering something serious and trying to combat it. Just a thought.)

Pansy Parkinson (My personal favourite, and always very mischaracterised by fangirls and arsehole guys. I'll die if you don't use her, I mean it, I'll literally -die-. *orders a coffin online just in case*)

I'm not crazy about harem fics normally, so I chose the characters I not only think would "look good" with Harry, but are less cliche and more interesting beyond the harem premise. I really enjoy the start though, and this chapter is all right as well. Is this a full-on Devil's Advocate xover? If so, is Kevin around and how does he fit into things? Assuming the potion made Harry half-devil just as if Milton had been his daddy all along, will any of the females turn out to be a similar half-breed? Will they be cooking up an antichrist together in her belly? I'll stop with the questions now. Cheers!

nice chappie i assume that he has become part incubi

the twins

Ah, I like your approach here. In answer to your question, I think, more than just collecting as many as possible, each one should fulfill some strategy or desire and for each to be well set up. I agree that too many women spoil the harem. I would also love to see some understanding and choice before the rite for at least a couple of them. A choice if you will. I imagine that would work well for Tonks and Fleur, as they are different. Fleur could even /ask/ that her sister beincluded, but be refused because of the age factor.

Thank you for writing.

Mike (MoA)

How come Lily couldn't 'apparate' away when James was downstairs with Voldie?

lets see what happens

wow i love this story and how u used the devil himself instead of a lower level i can't wait to read more i love this kind of story

Interesting start. Please write more.

This is interesting I wonder what the demon really wants.
How far forward are you going to skip ahead?