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dont worry about what the other people think because the idea of a fanfic is to write however you want to write your story. even though its not in the same dialect as books or movies or anything like that, you have to make it your own and not copy everyone else. how you write this story is very awsome. its your story and it makes what you are. so what if its not in the british language? not everyone can understand that language for it is a very hard language to get accustomed to. so dont let everyone get to you from the way you write..keep it up :)

I just started reading your story and can understand how it might upset you that people don't like the word ya'll in context with people that they have grown to know and understand. I too and from the south, so I do see your side. But in the same return you have to see theirs. I understand, this is part of who you are, but it's not Hermione or Dumbledore, they just don't speak like that. They are refined people who use a very proper form of British English. Now people are going to comment on that. Like I said, I'm from the south too, but you have to make the characters believable and making them speak like country folk just don't work. I'm sorry if this upsets you, but I had to say it.

Please don't kill off Draco and I don't really want them to be separated either

Good for you babe! i am american too and have some very good friends of mine that say ya'll so dont worry! i actually i kinda like it! it makes your story unique, so dont worry about what other people say because it did not bother me; besides i know how it is i am a terrible speller too. :) as to what will happen to everyone is up to you and is your discison. but if you want input that i can do my dear! ;) i would like them to stay together put it may not work out maybe so thing happening to have to have them put back together. but maybe in the in between moments have them think about each other, their situation, and what might happen-to them, the baby(ies), each other, or what will happen....... i think i got my point and way beyond it too (sorry some times i ramble). as to the baby idea i love the taught of twins, but i dont care i also dont care if it is a boy or girl if you only do one. one thing i know that you have had a potion taken to 'speed things up' as it were but could something have reacted badly and not have that potion work and have that be our twist besides it might have a lot of things change that way! well just a thaught-please write more!!! (and no killing anyone yet! PLEASE!) loves from Citten :)

hey i love it bc im from louisiana so i know what your talkin about, your right it is your story for YOU to write anyway you want bc its for your pleasure. and im glad that you write it bc i take pleasure in reading it!!

Nice story. Although your spelling can indeed be viewed as strange, here it is the contents that counts for me... keep up the good work. And please, don't let Draco die. Why not let Hermione have twins - boy and girl?

im not sure what i want,but not draco dying.please

I noticed that you deleted my review, and that's certainly your choice. Just so you know, I'm not angry. Also, my offer to beta your fic still stands. Either way, take care.

I really liked this story, but I'm sorry that I just can't get past the the blatant out of character language used. "Ya'll is simply not a phrase an English person would ever use. Speaking as an English person myself, every time one of your characters comes out with this, it just drags me write out of the plot and makes me feel like they are just not the characters I know. A much less important, but still slightly grating is the use of American spelling/ words that are different in the UK (you have this in common with most authors on this site). For England its mum, not mom.

Judging from your authors note at the top of the second page I fear that you may not appreciate my comments, but I feel that reviews should be honest and I hope you can take my comments in the spirit with which they are meant; I like your story enough to take the time, to point out something which I feel is detracting from it.

where to start, where to start. okay i really liked the idea about twins but i just did not occure to me that they would know that much yet. though i love the idea regardless. :) next YOU CANT KILL DRACO THAT IS JUST CRUEL TO US AND EVERYONE!!!!! there i got that out. it would serious cut the story. beside i was looking forward to LOTS more. :) but as always this is your story and i just cant wait to see what YOU will do with it. until next time-and it better be soon!!!! :)
ps i dont know who to feel worse for being separated, draco or hermione and who will it be harder on?