rate_review Reviews

Fantastic! I sooo need chapter 5!

Holy moly! I sooo need chapter 4!

I love this! This story is brilliant and imaginative and has that certain mystery shrouding it that makes a good story ever more interesting. I do hope you'll keep writing this and in time, finish it.

I really recommend going to LJ and checking out the hp_betas community. They can catch a lot of the mistakes (misspellings, homonym confusion, punctuation, etc.) that's showing up.

There's a great deal of backstory missing: How does Harry know these "Laws"? What timeline are you using/building? How did Draco get to Harry without being in the Zoo as well?

You've got a problem with continuity as well. The chapters, even within themselves, seem a bit disjointed. Again, you really need a couple of beta editors/readers to tighten up your English grammar and punctuation.

The premise is interesting, but, it really needs some work to make it all flow smoothly.

I like it so far and would be very interested in reading more!

Well this is interesting.

Interesting! I sooo can't wait for chapter 3! Will the child be human, draconian or dragon?