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by Inell

person JRTaylor
schedule April 11, 2020 at 12:00 AM

Fuuuuuuuckkkkk! MORE PLEASE!

schedule June 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
great stuff!

can't imagine what she'd imagine being with Bellatrix or Molly would be like
schedule December 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This was a hot PWP. Good job. Peace.
schedule August 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very lovely indeed. Though I do feel you missed a crucial female in the matter. How could you have a story about experimental lesbians and not include Madam Hooch? *snort* Though I often pretend she's straight for my musings, the woman is as queer as a three pound note. Your story, back to it, was well crafted, and highly entertaining. I did have a bit of trouble believing that Hermione had not been exposed to the computer before, however, I do suppose it makes sense if you're implying that they didn't get it until she was sixteen or seventeen, or some such.

I'm wondering, if in your descriptions of these pictures, did you try surfing for actual images just to see how easy it was? I mean obviously some of them were made up to fit the characters, but, I find sometimes when I'm writing, I end up doing some of the things that the characters are doing, just to see what it's like, so I was wondering if perhaps you did.

I also enjoyed the built progression and liked that it started with Luna. Though I'm not sure ending with Lavender and Parvati was as climactic as it could have been. Though the bit with Tonks was wonderful. Narcissa too. :)

I liked it very much. Congratulations on a fic. well written. :)
person Anon
schedule June 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Interesting... Very very good.
schedule June 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
WOW. I usually am not into femmeslash but you did an AMAZING job.
person Hermyone
schedule June 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, very hot. I hope theres some real action to come between this bunch. :)