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January 28, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Beautiful story.
Keep up the great work.
Please update soon.
SM
Keep up the great work.
Please update soon.
SM
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March 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this is interesting. please update again soon.
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November 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I loce your story. I like your ideas and I hope that they continue on with it. You have a wonderful start.
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June 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really liked this. It`s different, but a good different.
I vote for fem slash an mpreg :D
Please update soon.
I vote for fem slash an mpreg :D
Please update soon.
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May 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I hope you can update soon! Aside from the puncuation errors, this is a very interesting story!
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May 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
good story
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May 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I see you have it all thought out. Quite interesting so far, but there isn't too much to review. You must have spent a lot of time to develop all those creatures and I'm looking forward to see how you will incorporate them in your story.
Also this is one of the very few stories where physical abuse has its immediate reaction. Usually it's something along the lines: Harry gets raped but the only outward sign of it is flinching and that's all.
Unfortunately there are few misspelled or rather misplaced words, like: 'metal instability', 'with' instead of 'will', 'each' instead of 'eat' and often 'in' instead of 'if' or 'is'.
And there is of course the question of what happened with Harry's things and what of Petunia. Will she still leave with Vernon dead or will she become a suspect?
As far as the pairings go I vote for Hermione/Cho Chang or even Hermione/Luna Lovegood. I believe the second pairing is much better, they are much different with Hermione's down to earth attitude and Luna's fantasy world, but I think that in a strange way they complete each other and after all there is some truth that opposits attract. I don't really care who Ron end up with as long as it's not with Hermione. Let's say it could be Ron/Neville.
To sum it all up: interesting so far and we'll see what the future holds.
Also this is one of the very few stories where physical abuse has its immediate reaction. Usually it's something along the lines: Harry gets raped but the only outward sign of it is flinching and that's all.
Unfortunately there are few misspelled or rather misplaced words, like: 'metal instability', 'with' instead of 'will', 'each' instead of 'eat' and often 'in' instead of 'if' or 'is'.
And there is of course the question of what happened with Harry's things and what of Petunia. Will she still leave with Vernon dead or will she become a suspect?
As far as the pairings go I vote for Hermione/Cho Chang or even Hermione/Luna Lovegood. I believe the second pairing is much better, they are much different with Hermione's down to earth attitude and Luna's fantasy world, but I think that in a strange way they complete each other and after all there is some truth that opposits attract. I don't really care who Ron end up with as long as it's not with Hermione. Let's say it could be Ron/Neville.
To sum it all up: interesting so far and we'll see what the future holds.