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well this is pure brilliance, please update again soon i cant wait to see what happens next, the egg thing is completely discusting by the way.

Yay an update

The fake name Harry used really does fit him. I'm glad that Severus is finally seeing Harry for who he really is even if it is slow. Update again soon

I really really like this one!! Can you write some more please? (Yes, I know I am very selfish!)

You know your killing me all your works are good but I need more and soon up date update update

AHHHHH! NONONONONOOOOOOOOOO! How could you cut it off there???? Mid conversation!?!?!?! AARGH! I DEMAND an UPDATE! No later than yesterday!

A most interesting story and I can't wait to see what happens next. Wonderful work!~Sophia

I like it

You have an interesting story started, but it would be a *lot* better if you had a beta reader help you with it. I didn't see very many issues with spelling. (That may be because I'm a horrible speller.) However, you need help with sentence structure and grammar. There were a lot of areas that were hard to read. Several times, I had to pause to try and figure-out what you had meant.

Please don't be offended by my question, but is English second language for you? If so, a beta could help you better learn the language. If you are a native speaker of English, well, English can be tricky.

Oh! I forgot to say in my review that I hope you keep writing. The plot has caught my attention and I curious to see what happens next.

~R

Nice work, I enjoyed the first few chapters. Keep at it.