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hold up I wanted to read the originals can you send them to me? at alabastershadow (at) gmail.com :D

I don't think you should have revised. :/ I mean, yes it was extrmeme but this is your story, although I can see why you would at risk of losing loyal readers. :/ I didn't like what Severus did, but I understand that is part of the way the story has to go for it to make sense to you and the way you wrote it :) I support your decision, although I do hope that you will maybe keep doing it this way? Adding the regular and revised edition for those who might not like the squick value? I mean it isn't arousing or anything, but it is part of the tale, therefore I accept reading it :) Please take this is support for the way you are going and not anything else.

I look forward to reading more!

I don't have to revise anything, you're the author after all and if people don't like ur plot summary that could piss off lol, but no really your story is pretty dark and angsty but I still think it's really good! and i'm looking forward to reading what comes up next!!!

I did think the original chapters were pretty brutal but that's not what I would have thought anyone would have a problem with. Rather the whole seven days prior and after thing. That seems a bit much, overkill. For the binding, I mean. But I love the way you write so either versions of the new chapters work fine for me. I was all excited when I saw there was 61 chapters, I figured they were new ones. But I understand revising. It's nice of you to do that for concerned readers.

I must say I am a little dissappointed that you want to rewrite the last chapters! You picked the topic of abuse and that is never pretty! It is upsetting and I think you wrote it well. I liked the story anyways!

No Hey! I like the chappys you wrote don't rewrite them. I love this story the way it is ccino!

Oh no, please don't rewrite them! Yes it's true that Severus has been very hard on Lou. Severus has to be, they are going up against the Dark Lord. I do wonder why Lou is fighting so much on obeying him? Did she not understand why it has to be this way? All she has to do is obey his orders for seven days and he won't spank her anymore or at least as much. I know Severus keeps trying to get her to realize what she has to do to avoid punishment by having her read and reread the book. Why can't he just explain the bonding to her again? Is it because once the bonding has started he can't talk to her about it again and explain the plan to defeet the Dark Lord? Yes I know I've asked a lot of question. Please don't rewrite your story it's good just how it is.Thanks

I don't see why you would wish to rewrite your story, just because a couple of people were freaked out? This is an adult site for adult people, you are free to write whatever you want. There are far worse stories here than this one, both in quality and content. As I wrote in my previous review, obviously the topic of abuse is an issue you feel you need to exploit, since the heroines of both your stories get afflicted by it quite a bit. But, if you feel like you need to bow down to popular opinion, go ahead ;-)

I agree with everyone above me.
Your story is perfect the way it is.
People come to this site because they don't want watered down stories. This story has abuse, beatings, and hard themes... but thats what make the charactors go on such a journey. The story wouldn't make since without it.
Please don't change it, it's amazing the way it is. And don't water down the rest of it- it wouldn't be the same without the wonderful detail you put into it!
-Elle
P.S. When I said I was close to tears... thats a good thing because I am emotionally involved. Most stories arn't like that. It was a goooood thing, not a bad one.

I'm not sure how much more of this I can take! Poor Lou, please Master, there must be another way!