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This is a good story. But one thing, could you please stop writing author's notes in the middle of the story? It inturrupts the flow of the story and is quite annoying. Most Fanfiction writters who have written author's notes think its cute. Let me assure it that it isn't. I've tried in the past to tell the authors this and the only way it seems to get across is this way--in all of the writings of J.K. Rowling has she ever written an author's note? No, and neither should you. If you have something to say, leave it for the beginning or the end of each chapter. This may seem harsh, but I honestly have the best interest of the story in mind when I give you this advice. Because let's face it, if a reader gets fed up with a story, they will drop it. And you as the writter don't want that, right? The story is great. Please don't let foolishness like excessive author's notes get in the way of it becoming an excellent one. Good luck and please update soon.

This is a awesome story. Each chapter is exciting and fresh. Can hardly wait for Hermione's revenge.

these two are so much fun!! i cant wait to see what you will do and i so love the evil side of hermione! well do update soon and let us know what they do and no worries about the delay in the last time of updating all is forgiven with the lemons! ;) in case my e-mail does not show up or you cant get it her it is princesscrystalcitten@yahoo.com

ooooh, teh hawtness! Wagner! Tristan und Isolde -- Liebestod. Musical Erotica. Well done!

a good story with good characterization,but you really must stop with the author's notes,they're amateurish and distracting.

The way you ended Ch. 20 was very immature. It reads like, 'Let's prove to the Granger's what a crude, sadistic pedophile I can be, while I paw your young daughter in front of you!' I should think Hermione would be appalled by his actions, too. Going from hardly knowing him, to suddenly engaged, to being violated in front of her parents in a few short hours. Poorly done, IMHO.

You spoiled us with very frequent updates and disappeared for a bit. Merlin did I miss this story! Glad you are back, can't wait till I see more.

I would love to read more of this story.

I KNOW there are lemons coming. If I tell you how much I love your story, and you over all excellence will please pretty please post it?

I love this story this much [----------------------------------------------------------------------------------]
and you are excellent.

Lame, I know, but I want those lemons! lol.

more more! I love that the elves are doing in-outie as well! (i dont want to see the visual though, i'm afraid) lol Please post more asap