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*emits an Lucy Ricardo wail* i wanted more updates but with a promise like that i guess that i can wait. get back to civilization soon. *kisses* Amai

i like the story,and i hope you have fun in the boondocks.ive never been there but a freind of mine has and she loved, she even met her husband there.update when you can,and dont rush a good story.going a lttle slower will be fine cause youll have to unpack and stuff,but have fun and enjoy ur vacation.

sam

dude it's chill ^_^ we'll all still be here to read your gloriously grammar-mistake ridden story. If people really care that badly about a few little mistakes they can go suck a tree frog! Your story is absolutely fuckin' fantastic! Have fun in the Boondocks!^_^

Well, it does suck that you won't be updating for awhile, but I think I can deal. I love this story, so I can't wait until you do the next chapter.

Okay. I hope this won't come across as a flame, because I certainly don't intend it this way. Your story has an interesting plot, a nice development and some good characterisation (especially Harry), considering the plot. It is NOT badfic, or I wouldn't have read it up to the latest chapter... but...

"I don't need a beta". Sorry, but you do. Badly. Or at the very least use a word processor with a spell-checker. There are many mistakes - spelling, grammar, ponctuation - some of them repeated all along the story, meaning they're not mere typos. You may not care, but some readers will find them disruptive enough to stop reading your story.

This is a nice fic you've got here, but a beta would improve it tenfold.

where are you? it's not like you not to uptade. please come back to us...

lol...it's poetic_justice_served@hotmail.co.uk and I thought I had it on my profile. Does it not show up? What crap...I'll try to fix that, lol. I await your e-mail! ^_^

~ FA

Okay, the smut was...okay. It was a bit choppy and kinda rough, but if you've never written smut before that's to be expected. My suggestion is to read a WHOLE lot of smut right before you right a scene with it so you've got something to work off of fresh in your memory. My other suggestion is to possibly get a beta who writes a lot of smut. Such as me. ^_^ No, it was very good, I promise, other than the expected choppiness.

Write more! Your Devoted Reader, ~ FA

WOW VERY VERY GOOD STORY
KEEP GOING AND POST SOON
BYE BYE

I loved it. I have read this story so many times, that I almost know every sentence. I can't wait for the next chapter.