rate_review Reviews

I really enjoyed your story :)

You keep saying falling into the sick or covering up the sick. It's still vomit. Covering up the vomit or falling in the vomit.

I've read this story like a million times and I love it. Dumbledore just pissed me off though. What right does he have to control Harry's life like that? he should have minded his own business. I would have reported him if that were me talking to him. I also would have told him to jump off a cliff to his death just so he'd leave me alone. Harry should have done more, like stand up to him.

I think that Harry should know who raped Draco, it is important. And sick. Sick, sick, sick. And the story just doesn't seem finished to me.

well that was shit

Great story!
Some of the ideas are really cool, and the plot is not exactly the usual, either. : )
Unfortunately, I still considered not finishing it several times, because of the many spelling and grammar mistakes. Could you get a beta to look through it? It would make it so much more agreeable to read. For example, did you know the simple past of "see" is "saw"? Judging by your liberal use of the perfect form "seen", not really; also, the correct number of Fs and Ss in 'professor' would be good... But anyway, I didn't mean to be flaming you, so I'll stop here.
Just... it's too good a story to lose readers simply because of the spelling.
Consider getting a beta?
Greetings,
Dime

This is NOT a flame, but you really must improve your command of the English language if you're going to write in such a prolific manner. The worst offenders: "I seen it" (and variations thereof) and "your" instead of "you're." The past tense of "to see" is saw. Seen is a perfect construction, used only in phrases such as "I have seen it before." Your is a personal pronoun. You're is a contraction meaning "you are." Please, please, please have someone beta for you if you cannot fix your grammatical errors yourself. Otherwise, interesting character development, and a good exploration of the after-effects of abuse.

that was an awesome fic!!

lol thinking of draco acting like that is just too funny , i love it

Ah a fabouls ending to a fabouls story.