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November 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I find myself seven chapters in and actually enjoying this. The Shock! Or as Fleur would say, "Le Horreur!" ;)
Normally I'm extremely picky about punctuation, grammar, canon. There are a couple mechanical issues (a lack of commas in some sentences) and a few oddities (minors being able to cast spells off-grounds before the end of Year Seven, but I could be wrong because I'm trying to erase much of Deathly Hallows from memory), etc., but I think your writing is good enough overall to capture the emotions and motivations of the characters accurately and not distract me from the plot. It continues to improve from chapter to chapter, actually.
Yes, that was a compliment. I didn't mean to say it in such a backhanded way, but I try to give constructive criticism to everyone.
I haven't finished reading, obviously, so I'm hoping that you are going to finish this. It's why I love Hermione with Draco, Snape, Lucius, Riddle... other het pairings never have as many twisted and lovely plots as they do. Mwahahahahaaaaa.
Keep up the good work.
Normally I'm extremely picky about punctuation, grammar, canon. There are a couple mechanical issues (a lack of commas in some sentences) and a few oddities (minors being able to cast spells off-grounds before the end of Year Seven, but I could be wrong because I'm trying to erase much of Deathly Hallows from memory), etc., but I think your writing is good enough overall to capture the emotions and motivations of the characters accurately and not distract me from the plot. It continues to improve from chapter to chapter, actually.
Yes, that was a compliment. I didn't mean to say it in such a backhanded way, but I try to give constructive criticism to everyone.
I haven't finished reading, obviously, so I'm hoping that you are going to finish this. It's why I love Hermione with Draco, Snape, Lucius, Riddle... other het pairings never have as many twisted and lovely plots as they do. Mwahahahahaaaaa.
Keep up the good work.
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November 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I am so glad to see this chapter! This is one of my favorite stories and it totally made my day to see this! This was a good chapter and it added to the overall story. I still can't wait to get back to the relationship between Hermione and Draco. And of course find out more about the babies.
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November 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
well at least your trying! so ouch! well severus is no longer with us, again i thaught it was bad in book seven well you proved that wrong. so i lucius going to get a back bone and help his son and help save the world or is he going to continue to be a spineless follower of evil? well i am so looking forward to where you will take us now. so do update soon and let us know where you are going! :) i will be waiting, my dear.
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November 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow i am really enjoying your story so far! whens the next chapter? :)
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November 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You killed my lover, you evil woman.
heh, great chappie, as always, very riveting and writing smut is a curse, I just cant seem to stop. Be glad you dont think about it as much as I obviously do. :P KEEP it up girlie.
Love the,
Reirei.
heh, great chappie, as always, very riveting and writing smut is a curse, I just cant seem to stop. Be glad you dont think about it as much as I obviously do. :P KEEP it up girlie.
Love the,
Reirei.
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November 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow that was a slightly unexpected chapter! it was good though and so filled with angst!!! please keep up with the excellent updates
while I'm here I just wanna ask if we can get another chapter of the deflowering of Draco Malfoy - please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
while I'm here I just wanna ask if we can get another chapter of the deflowering of Draco Malfoy - please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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November 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I totally got lazy logging in and just clicked on your story on the moment I saw it. AND continue on reviewing right away. Inspite of the burning cooking for thanksgiving.
Taps on the back for your another surprising transaction of events. But I really and totally hope that Hermione's babies won't look like a pair of missing nosed freaks when they're born. I'll totally go ballistic.
Poor poor Draco. A new juicy challenge on the way for him. Make right decsions Draco... :O
And don't let me start on talking about Snape. You just started putting him on your story and then all of the sudden he's gone. Woah. Poor for him too. Well he didn't much have any use to your story anyways. ☺ So its cool.
The only thing I have to tell you now is,
Goble, goble on Thanksgivng and may it nourish you to be inspired to come up with a speedy new update.
Nawdz
Taps on the back for your another surprising transaction of events. But I really and totally hope that Hermione's babies won't look like a pair of missing nosed freaks when they're born. I'll totally go ballistic.
Poor poor Draco. A new juicy challenge on the way for him. Make right decsions Draco... :O
And don't let me start on talking about Snape. You just started putting him on your story and then all of the sudden he's gone. Woah. Poor for him too. Well he didn't much have any use to your story anyways. ☺ So its cool.
The only thing I have to tell you now is,
Goble, goble on Thanksgivng and may it nourish you to be inspired to come up with a speedy new update.
Nawdz
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November 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
aaah...nooo...mommy, daddy....whaaaat!?!?!?!
jesus christ, u shocked me there...
severus dead??? more power for voldypants?? death for draco???
i'd love to see u try get out of that mess :P
don't u dare let draco die!!! or hermione for that matter!!!! ;P
anyway, hurry up, wanna see what comes next, nice writing though, poor snape (never thought i'd say that)
whose are the twins, btw??
Cam
jesus christ, u shocked me there...
severus dead??? more power for voldypants?? death for draco???
i'd love to see u try get out of that mess :P
don't u dare let draco die!!! or hermione for that matter!!!! ;P
anyway, hurry up, wanna see what comes next, nice writing though, poor snape (never thought i'd say that)
whose are the twins, btw??
Cam
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November 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awww.
Happy Thanksgiving to you too. :]
No need for body guards I can assure you that. Well for me that is. ;]
Another Aww for Snape. Poor him. I'll surely miss him. NOT!
Aww for Draco too. This only means one thing for him, another dilemma on the way for dear-ol-Draco? I totally feel sorry for him now.
And one last Aww for the dream thing. Why?? I wanna know! Just kdding.
Ofcourse.. I totally understand. The writer's rule, Suspense. Secrets. Surprises. Sooo Slytherinny. :] Readers Likey. :]
Hmm. triplets? Why the hell not? Told you so that I will really read it between the lines to make sure I won't be able to miss anything from your bravo story.
And you know its not actually a bad idea for Draco to switch like, say for him to drop 'accidentaly' an ounce of polyjuice potion to Blaise's drink don't you think? And then make Pansy come all over the pretend Draco/really-Blaise. But whatever your plans for the story will be great. :] As long you break the binding real fast. And for snakey-Voldie's plans, I just wish that Draco wouldn't fall for it. It will really bring him to complete lunacy. One loony is enough for HP.
I miss Hermione on this chapter though. How's the preganancy going? Back Pains yet? Twins are really a pain on the oven during baking.
Verie
And oh yeah, eat a lot on Thanksgiving. and one Last...
Update Soon! :]
Happy Thanksgiving to you too. :]
No need for body guards I can assure you that. Well for me that is. ;]
Another Aww for Snape. Poor him. I'll surely miss him. NOT!
Aww for Draco too. This only means one thing for him, another dilemma on the way for dear-ol-Draco? I totally feel sorry for him now.
And one last Aww for the dream thing. Why?? I wanna know! Just kdding.
Ofcourse.. I totally understand. The writer's rule, Suspense. Secrets. Surprises. Sooo Slytherinny. :] Readers Likey. :]
Hmm. triplets? Why the hell not? Told you so that I will really read it between the lines to make sure I won't be able to miss anything from your bravo story.
And you know its not actually a bad idea for Draco to switch like, say for him to drop 'accidentaly' an ounce of polyjuice potion to Blaise's drink don't you think? And then make Pansy come all over the pretend Draco/really-Blaise. But whatever your plans for the story will be great. :] As long you break the binding real fast. And for snakey-Voldie's plans, I just wish that Draco wouldn't fall for it. It will really bring him to complete lunacy. One loony is enough for HP.
I miss Hermione on this chapter though. How's the preganancy going? Back Pains yet? Twins are really a pain on the oven during baking.
Verie
And oh yeah, eat a lot on Thanksgiving. and one Last...
Update Soon! :]
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November 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Snape dies eh? Draco will want to off himself in addition to all the crazy...well that's not hard to see how he might be pushed to that point, poor boy has the shittiest luck ever! And my, my, Voldie was very devious wasn't he, what with his plans for the twins....right now I'm hoping snake poo is all he gets and those kids are Malfoy's...I still can't entertain the thought of combo birth either...they both must be both Malfoys!
LOL, wishful thinking aside- I'm a guilty one, I've not been working on my story at all, in fact I got hit in the head with plot bunny turds and anytime I sit down to work on not so I get sucked into these type thoughts like
"what if this happened in this other story...oh, that would be great fun...no must return to the one I'm working on! Oh shit no!!!! I must not type lines for stories not this one....arrrgggg damn traitorous fingers! Going to surf internet now..."
LOL, so that's about where I'm at. I don't think these other little side stories will be terribly interesting as Deflowering Of Draco Malfoy...which I btw now that I mention it, I could use another update of that one too...that was wicked how she taunted him I must know what happens next!
LOL, wishful thinking aside- I'm a guilty one, I've not been working on my story at all, in fact I got hit in the head with plot bunny turds and anytime I sit down to work on not so I get sucked into these type thoughts like
"what if this happened in this other story...oh, that would be great fun...no must return to the one I'm working on! Oh shit no!!!! I must not type lines for stories not this one....arrrgggg damn traitorous fingers! Going to surf internet now..."
LOL, so that's about where I'm at. I don't think these other little side stories will be terribly interesting as Deflowering Of Draco Malfoy...which I btw now that I mention it, I could use another update of that one too...that was wicked how she taunted him I must know what happens next!