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ack! I was hoping Draco would get a chance to explain the whole "we agreed for me to sperminate you and then you were obliviated" to her, she'd somehow get over the freak out to occur and they'd have the united front for uncertain times and all...but after the whole Pansy thing, shit just ain't going right for that boy! lol

Love it!

Nice job! A little shocking with the school nurse and the wooden penis, but hey, it was funny all the same! lol! And as for that bitch Pansy, ooooh I just want to strangle her myself! lol!

WOw, what a long chapter, thank you!
Poor Draco. Poor Hermione. What's there to say?
I loved how you wrote Draco's reactions to Pansy (hate her)
And Hermione finding out and thinking it was Draco playing a joke was a good twist. I'm sorry they didn't do anythng, but hey, that will happen soon enough.
He SERIOUSLY needs to find a way to tell her though! Maybe a pensieve of his memory, so she can see that it was her idea, and not him trying ot rape her or something. Ya know? I dunno, I only know I LOVE THIS STORY!

Glad to hear you had a great time and you got your cast off. School's back in session, bummer (that means daycare for me, OUCH!)
Write when you can!

i have been reading fanfiction for almost 5 years and i must say this is one of my top five favorite stories, i absolutely love it and can't wait for the next chapters!

Love, love, love and might I say More, more, more!

I like this fic quite a bit... It shows that you don't have to throw plot and good characterization out the window when writing uncensored fiction, although that does tend to speed things along! The way the characters interact seems to have a pretty natural feel to it. There could be more conflict, given how good of a plot there is... Draco's need to be protective can't change him much because he's still following orders. There's supposed to be a certain ambiguity over the result of Draco's original plan which he doesn't reflect upon much. Also I was surprised he didn't take the opportunity to cover his tracks when he got his orders from home... The drinking is interesting, although it doesn't work as well as most of the plot... Sometimes his reasons are thin, the bar is a bit accomidating, and he seems a little superhuman... The best part has to be the dialogue, it seems to be realistic no matter what the given situation, and the description of the nonverbal communication that accompanies it sells anything that might seem ooc at first glance. I think switching between viewpoints is done fairly well, most importantly, the switch from one viewpoint to another is never confusing. Maybe once or twice, I wished you hadn't gone back in time so far to pick up the other characters' viewpoint... I think this is most obvious when we already know a future state (especially the current state) of the other character from events in the first characters viewpoint... The recent bar scene is a good example if I remember correctly... I think it'd be cleaner to switch over to the character as they exist in the now, and do a line of thought or dialogue to get the why across. Guess that's drifting a bit into style, so... Anyway, good job. Like the fic.

-TsuQ

Oh god, this is so good. poor Hermione - I so wanted Draco to tell her just to see how she reacts and I like him being just a little bit sweet before he reverts back to the hot slytherin we know and love!

glad you are rid of your cast now if only so you can type more!

please post soon - I love this story so much!

please update soon. is there anyway for me to find out when you update

that was a great chapter..... please updte sooner rather then later!


PS your going to end this story? oh please not soon!?!?

LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE This story!!! Yet another excellent chapter, hope I don't have to wait too long for the next update, can't wait xxx