rate_review Reviews

A interesting idea for the story but the grammar is terrible. I hardly can understand some parts of the story especially on what's going on in the events. It will be great if you have a beta that can write English well. At this point in time it's kind of hard to read and understand what you want to write across to the readers. I hope you will update this English version beside your native language version one. Oh yeah, beside grammar issues please put appropriate grammar signs like a comma indicate one complete sentence end and another starts with similar topics. It's hard to read or understand what u try to said if there's no indication of where the sentence begin and end.

No offense, but did you throw this into an online translator and then post it? Not much of it makes sense, and the parts that do are all broken and wierd.

I like the idea and the plotline, but perhaps if you could find a beta who knows both your mother language AND English really well, it would look a LOT nicer. If you could find one, I'd be glad to read it again.

it is a good story, but you need to work more on the translation, or maybe get someone else to work on it, bye

its a really good story, but you really need to imrove the language. especially, you need to seperate the uses og 'it' and 'him'

What language are you translating From? Just a question. Your translator has left the senteces a little messed up. I was just wondering to see if I could help if I know the language.