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March 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Holy crap, you made me cry! That was so devastatingly beautiful and heartbreaking and perfect. I will tell you I am usually a silent reader, but this story deserved praise. Excellent job on writing this and thank you for sharing it with us readers. I look forward to reading more from you.
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March 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
How *sniff* incredibly *sniff* saaaaaad!
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March 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 1--Oh man, why do I do this to myself? I haven't read your story yet....but I read the reviews, so BRING ON THE KLEENEX (it sounds like). Or maybe by the time I get to the end, you will have updated it and made it happy.....(doubt it, but I can always hope) (PS I generally write my reactions as I read, so forgive my impending meltdown)
Oh jesus!!! Opening chapter and FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK! That's never good!!! OH BAD! RON SAW DRACO!!!!!! I think I know why Draco's there, and I don't appreciate you being mean, Ron!!!!! YOU BASTARD!!!!
Okay...Ron's protecting Hermio--wait a minute!!!! WTF WIDOW???????????????????????? HERMIONE AND HARRY????? (That's not right!) WTFFFFFFFFFF
OH MY GOD!!!!!! THAT'S ALMOST WORSE THAN THEM NEVER BEING TOGETHER!!!!!! BEING TOGETHER AND THEN BEING RIPPED APART?!!?!??!?!??!?!?!! sonofabitch!!!! BUT if they WERE together, that means there's hope of them getting BACK together!!!!
OH GOD!!! That's so sad for the Weasley family!!!! Poor Molly! And Ginny!!! WHAT HAPPENED TO HARRY??????
Hermione....thank you for being good to my Draco!!!
AWWWWWWW bittersweet sex scene!!!!! That breaks my heart!!!!!! OH GOD!!! *whimper* Ending with a fight just to survive it?????????????? MY BABIES!!!!!!
Cancer?????? CANCER?????? THE BOY WHO LIVED FUCKING BEAT VOLDEMORT TO DIE FROM CANCER?????????????????????? FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK NNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It's not fair!!! IT'S NOT FAIR DO YOU HEAR ME NOT FAIR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
(PS Nice touch...I didn't expect that)
And the ending.......totally not as bad as I thought it would be!!!!!! Tragic, yes, but (I have to believe that) they will be together in Heaven (or in death)!!!! If both of them can't be alive, then I'd rather have both of them dead, because at least they'll be together.
It's more tragic when one is alive but the other dead. But the MOST tragic (and the one that I can't handle) is if they're both alive and just not together...for whatever stupid reason. (With the exception of the ending of Samayel's "All I Ever Wanted"...I still can't handle that ending...it just depresses me too much)
This story was really good!!! Bittersweet, and of course, I'd rather have both of them alive and together, but absolutely, breathtakingly tragic!!!!
You did VERY well with the English! Here's the only mistake I found:
"I have already known that he loved you even before he himself found out" would be better said as "I already knew that he loved you; even before he himself realized it." or "I had already known that he loved you"
You're talking about Hermione knowing (before Harry did) that Harry longed for Draco. So therefore you're talking about a past event that occured BEFORE a past event, which means that you can't use the present tense to talk about it. Using "had" is better, but actually, if you just say that she "already knew" that is fine (and simpler)
And saying "he himself found out".......it has the wrong connotation, I think. "Find out" implies that an outside source reveals something to you, and I think you want to say that Harry "realized" his love for Draco, which means that he discovered it within himself (ie NOT an outside source) I know this is a really small point, but it's just my thought. (You *could* say "I already knew that he loved you, even before he discovered it for himself." which ALMOST has the connotation of "outside source" but because we're talking about love--and you can't help who you love; you just love them--then "discover" can work as in "he discovered it inside himself".)
Okay, enough with the English grammar lesson! I hope that was helpful, and can I request a happy reunion in Heaven or the Veil or the Afterlife or whatever??? lol
Oh jesus!!! Opening chapter and FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK! That's never good!!! OH BAD! RON SAW DRACO!!!!!! I think I know why Draco's there, and I don't appreciate you being mean, Ron!!!!! YOU BASTARD!!!!
Okay...Ron's protecting Hermio--wait a minute!!!! WTF WIDOW???????????????????????? HERMIONE AND HARRY????? (That's not right!) WTFFFFFFFFFF
OH MY GOD!!!!!! THAT'S ALMOST WORSE THAN THEM NEVER BEING TOGETHER!!!!!! BEING TOGETHER AND THEN BEING RIPPED APART?!!?!??!?!??!?!?!! sonofabitch!!!! BUT if they WERE together, that means there's hope of them getting BACK together!!!!
OH GOD!!! That's so sad for the Weasley family!!!! Poor Molly! And Ginny!!! WHAT HAPPENED TO HARRY??????
Hermione....thank you for being good to my Draco!!!
AWWWWWWW bittersweet sex scene!!!!! That breaks my heart!!!!!! OH GOD!!! *whimper* Ending with a fight just to survive it?????????????? MY BABIES!!!!!!
Cancer?????? CANCER?????? THE BOY WHO LIVED FUCKING BEAT VOLDEMORT TO DIE FROM CANCER?????????????????????? FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK NNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It's not fair!!! IT'S NOT FAIR DO YOU HEAR ME NOT FAIR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
(PS Nice touch...I didn't expect that)
And the ending.......totally not as bad as I thought it would be!!!!!! Tragic, yes, but (I have to believe that) they will be together in Heaven (or in death)!!!! If both of them can't be alive, then I'd rather have both of them dead, because at least they'll be together.
It's more tragic when one is alive but the other dead. But the MOST tragic (and the one that I can't handle) is if they're both alive and just not together...for whatever stupid reason. (With the exception of the ending of Samayel's "All I Ever Wanted"...I still can't handle that ending...it just depresses me too much)
This story was really good!!! Bittersweet, and of course, I'd rather have both of them alive and together, but absolutely, breathtakingly tragic!!!!
You did VERY well with the English! Here's the only mistake I found:
"I have already known that he loved you even before he himself found out" would be better said as "I already knew that he loved you; even before he himself realized it." or "I had already known that he loved you"
You're talking about Hermione knowing (before Harry did) that Harry longed for Draco. So therefore you're talking about a past event that occured BEFORE a past event, which means that you can't use the present tense to talk about it. Using "had" is better, but actually, if you just say that she "already knew" that is fine (and simpler)
And saying "he himself found out".......it has the wrong connotation, I think. "Find out" implies that an outside source reveals something to you, and I think you want to say that Harry "realized" his love for Draco, which means that he discovered it within himself (ie NOT an outside source) I know this is a really small point, but it's just my thought. (You *could* say "I already knew that he loved you, even before he discovered it for himself." which ALMOST has the connotation of "outside source" but because we're talking about love--and you can't help who you love; you just love them--then "discover" can work as in "he discovered it inside himself".)
Okay, enough with the English grammar lesson! I hope that was helpful, and can I request a happy reunion in Heaven or the Veil or the Afterlife or whatever??? lol
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March 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was horribly sad! I can't believe it! It made me want to cry the whole time Draco was talking to Hermione, but especially at the end when it said Draco's aching heart followed Harry's call.. TT__TT. It was very well written, wonderful.
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March 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It made me want to cry!!
It really made me feel sad and the last part was saddest of all because I'm sure Harry would want him to continue to live.
I loved it!!
It really made me feel sad and the last part was saddest of all because I'm sure Harry would want him to continue to live.
I loved it!!
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March 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I have to say that you made one of the best Tragedy stories ever.
Truely remarkible.
Award Winning.
That truely is a peice of art.
(continues rant of compliments)
How long did it take you to write it? Proffread?
Truely remarkible.
Award Winning.
That truely is a peice of art.
(continues rant of compliments)
How long did it take you to write it? Proffread?