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EVIL AUTHOR!!!! MORE!!!

very cliche, both the internal monologue and the Snape and Vernon confrontation.
too short.
half of the chapter squashed into one paragraph did not appeal reading interest.
plz chek grammar and spelling.

Next chapter please.

I like it thus far, though that was quite the evil cliffhanger you left readers to dangle on. The title makes me think of crepes (you know, those thin italian pancake things) they are so yummy with strawberries and whipped cream, come to think of it crepes with strawberries and whipped cream, snape with strawberries and whipped cream... *grabs train of thought before getting too off track* anyhow thanks for sharing your story!

love the story please update real soon

an ok start. for a beginner, i'd say u'll improve, so dun get too worked up when u get criticism on ur first fic.
as my usual preference, i prefer longer chapters. this felt more like a preview. so give more content n substance, would make it more interesting. cuz like this, it reads like any other fics' start.
i'm sure u'd improve by time, but just so u know, reading through it lacks a tiny bit of smoothness. maybe it's just me, but it may be the phrasing style.
anyway, i hope there's more to come, n have fun with it.

Very nice but very short.

I don't know. It's way too short for a chapter and the idea way too overdone. I won't bother keeping up with it.

awesomenessessessess!!!!!!!!!!! More.............Please?