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this is very good. hurry and write more.

Wow, that was really disturbing. Nothing too over the top though, to say the least. I have to say your last line made my eyes bulge out. I don't know if you were serious or not, it doesn't matter. Will there be more chapters? Any new victims? Is Tom merely a sadist with a love for material things, or would he have killed her if she was a witch? I must know!

Thanks, Danine. Great questions. It says in canon, regarding the last line that TMR did indeed terrorize two fellow orphans in a cave, you probably know that. He did not kill her because of the choker, it is not a love of material things at all. Dumbledore said Tom Riddle liked to keep souvenirs of his victims, that is why he kept the choker and put it on his dresser and he would eventually throw it out, because Ophelia was not important enough to even make a horcrux with her murder. I am totally serious about putting her corpse in the cave, which I am going to show in the next chapter. Because there were so many inferi in the cave in canon, I'd say it's highly probable that there are other victims of Voldemort that we don't know of in canon, including maybe even a prostitute like Ophelia. He would have killed her even if she was a witch, but would not have become so enraged when unexpectantly learning she was a squib. The squib thing, reminded Tom subconsciously of his mother, Merope. Because Ophelia's station was low and so was his mother's and he partially killed her as a statement of his subconscious hatred of women. A lot of serial-killers in real-life have that hatred. I also chose her name as "Ophelia Sinistra" quite randomly. But when I looked up Ophelia, I saw it's meaning is 'serpent'. Her full name therefore means "sinister serpent" and she is a disowned squib. Serpents also usuually represent feminity, and we see that later with Voldemort's snake Nagini. I think it natural for him to have a victim like Ophelia. I guess he could have more victims, but Riddle would not want the news to get out and people to wonder why so many prostitutes are disappearing without a trace. He is very cautious after all and has to cover his tracks completely. I imagine, during his three or so years at Borgin's he would have only a few female victims. Just enough so nobody would remember or have somebody like Dumbledore snooping and make the connection.

Ahh! I love the use of Inferi in connection to this gruesome act. Understandable too, about his mother. He was so certain that his father was the wizard, it's possible he may have obsessed on it, leading him to murder all of the Riddles, feeling duped. And then to find out his mother was the weak one, leaving him alone to die for sheer lack of will.

Another question. Does Tom limit himself to women? Will there be any male killings? It seems to me that his obsessions are centred on males more than females. As in the case of his father and Harry Potter. I suspect women mean little to him, and that is why they make the best victims, but it's worth asking. Thanks for responding! I really love this story.

can I please have a review?...I'm really nervous what you think. I know it's rough. Tell me, someone, anyone, so I can go to sleep peacefully!

Oh, this is a tease!@! Way too short. I'm dying to find out what happens next, please update soon!!

Wow, interesting. I'd like to read more. Delving into Tom Riddle's past is scary! He could easily have been this very person. It really fits. I love the touch with him eyeing the choker. Nice work, I'm totally creeped out but want more.

Alright, I'm hooked. Sounds very interesting and I only hope it gets better.