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This was surprisingly good. I'm very critical when it comes to Voldemort, since people seem to make him too OoC. But yours is fantastic!

I must say, this was for the most part, extremely well-written, and I did enjoy it immensely. There were a few things that turned me off, and that was the descriptions you used for various body parts (boobs, huge dick, etc.). Also, chapter four seemed odd to me in the style you wrote with. It seemed disconnected somehow from the three previous chapters, almost as though someone else had written it, and there were numerous spelling errors which made it difficult for me to become as absorbed into the story as I had been in the previous chapters. I definitely see how easily someone like Riddle/Voldemort would go back to their daily routine with barely (if any) a backward glance at what had transpired the night before. Something that I have a question on though, was when you had Riddle pinching Ophelia's nipples. Had she given birth to a baby that she was nursing? Because otherwise there is no way her nipples would leak milk unless she had a milk-filled cyst (I did a little research on it after reading your story because that "fact" just got under my skin, and you hadn't given any info on whether or not she was a nursing mother).

Something else that bothered me was your use of the term, "Warlock." I don't know if you did any research on the subject, but books I've read seem to be quite adament that a Warlock is NOT a male witch, nor Wizard. They are something else entirely, though I have been unable to find out what, since all research I have ever done refuses to go in depth on the subject. So, I don't know if that was intentional on your part regarding Riddle being so dark that there is a possibility that he is no longer a Wizard, but is becoming a Warlock, or if you just felt that the two are interchangeable, which (and if anyone who reads this is Wiccan AND KNOWLEDGEABLE about Warlocks wishes to correct me, please, feel free as I am not Wiccan, but have done some research by reading books [mostly by Raven Grimassi] on Wicca) they are not.

At any rate, I did enjoy this story, and I like the idea you came up with for it.

Thanks for another review...I'm glad you liked it. I'm sure it happened in canon similarly and even if it didn't, Jo would have to be kidding herself. Riddle's life can't possibly be rated a mere PG-13...Rather, at times LV's life would be R or X rather!

I also hate Ooc Voldemort fics...actually in my opinion 90% of the Voldemort fics out there, portray him out of character, and annoy me so much I won't finish them. Yet I did find a few that I did not write, but most of them do not go long enough or give him enough of the spotlight. Anyway...I'm considering backtracking on this story. Within the next few months, I might be writing another "Riddle the Ripper" tale of a different set of victims when he worked at Borgin's.

And I'll try to update "The Midsummer Coup" by this Saturday the latest. If you want, I hope you read sometime my other Voldemort fic on here, "His Glowing Reputation." It starts out a little poor...maybe...but the middle has it's hideous, imaginative elements...the sex he has is really strange.

Very realistic, though rather disturbing, as usual lol. I enjoyed how you made his character extremely cruel and heartless as he is natuarlly. I really do hate when people go and make a charcter completely OOC for their own amusements or lack thereof. It's very a very seamless story, I can imagine it located somewhere in the 'forbidden section' where all the adult content is omitted to in HP world. I especially enjoyed the part where he waves to the Inferni, feeling some sort of odd attachment to them. That was hilarious! XD
I'm always constantly marveling at how nasty he is! I did feel rather sorry for that squib Ophelia however, what a waste. You made her so it was a constant battle on pity and frustration towards her . . . I'm sure there would have been alot of employments she could have pursued besides that of prostitution!

Hi, Pensieve Person, this was a fascinating read.

I can absolutely see where you're coming from with this - a man who becomes the legendary force for evil and darkness that he does would get an evening's kicks in this way and have not the slightest pang of conscience. Just as the real Jack the Ripper probably did, though sadly we may never know who he was or why he did what he did. Ties in nicely with canon - his disdain for Squibs and his attempt to divert his own self-loathing at being a half-blood by transferring it on to poor Ophelia, as well as the scene with the inferi in the cave. Jack the Ripper never dismembered his victims but he did eviscerate them - again, I would love to know why, but there are lots of theories, psychosexual reasons being at the front of the queue. I'm interested to know, do you study criminal or forensic psychology? I can imagine that being right up your street.

But, reading through some of your review comments, I had to laugh. Are there really 'Riddle fans' who think he was a nice guy underneath it all? LOL!

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I like it, its creepy, but I want to see what happens next.

Here is some info I'd like to add:

I think Voldemort may have been a necrophliac as well as his dismemberment of corpses. We know he did dismember corpses at least magically though the act of making Inferi. Yet I think he is a necrophliac as well. Some necrophliacs are according to http://www.answers.com/topic/necrophilia, to be known as:

wow, that was pretty fucked up and unexpected, but I am actually interested to see where the plot tkaes it regardless of the necrophelia attached to it :/ Hrm, points in your favor are you are a good writer and there are other things outside of the fucking a corpse, so *thumbs up*

Glad you love this story and I love discussing it in reviews. First I also wanted to add, that I came up with the spikes that nail her to the wall from canon. They were seen in Borgin's when Harry was spying on Draco and his dad in there in COS. It's possible Riddle could have bought or got some for free then many years before between 1943-47. I think he would select females as victims only because Riddle always seemed to view them as the weaker sex. He would not feel confident enough to go after men, he would like overpowering, what he views as weak uninmportant women. He may not have overpowered her as much, if she had been a witch, because very deep down Voldemort is a coward (I hate to admit). I think his obsession is centered on males (Harry, his father, Dumbledore, etc) because he sees them as the enemies and the threa to him and he has never seen a woman that way. Subconsciously in the story, it was Riddle's rage over his mother's weakness in death and giving up magic, that made him really want to murder Ophelia so brutally.