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April 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was wonderful! Need chapter 18! The only problem I found was is Lucius dead before or after Severus finds out. The reason I brought it up was it seemed that Severus found out almost immediately and this chapter mentioned he was killed later. So how much later?
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April 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god, that chapter (well the second part lol) was so freekin' hot. Draco was just the gentleman wasn't he? Sigh! And I tell you what, Dan Radcliffe can sing to me anytime he wants. I just loved Draco singing and I bet he has a beautiful voice, there is nothing bad you can say about Draco's looks and body so having a great singing voice would probably be normal for him. This was a great chapter hun, and I soooooo can't wait for more. I'm emailing you re: that pic. Update soon.
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April 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well..I did go back and re-read, but still it confused me. If, just if, Draco has led a life that Snape was approved of (i.e. marrying Pansy, conceiving Parker and being Lord Malfoy) in 6 or 7 years, would not that be enough time to calm Snape? Cissa is different, as she thought Draco was no longer her child, he really was a traitor and very much wanted her own son dead. For Blaise, as long as he got Pansy's love and trust (even able to threaten Draco!), he was out of the picture...so why is Snape still being so fury against Draco?
If Snape is really obsessed with Draco, protraying as the only protector and guidance (even against Dumbledore and Cissa), with Blaise's persuasion, his dislike would re-direct to Harry. And he succeed it...so how can very suddenly (at least to me) the plan would change to Draco's + Harry's revenge? Have something happened?
Also if Harry hated Draco so much as shown in the order, has anything happened between them during Draco's disguise during the summer? Or the ten days before the New Year eve? I strongly believe you have held up something between the two and would love to find out more when you update...
Lastly, for your other fic of punishing Lucuis, I have read it but...well, I can only give thanks for the punishment, I still need sometime to accomplish it, sure I will review later!
If Snape is really obsessed with Draco, protraying as the only protector and guidance (even against Dumbledore and Cissa), with Blaise's persuasion, his dislike would re-direct to Harry. And he succeed it...so how can very suddenly (at least to me) the plan would change to Draco's + Harry's revenge? Have something happened?
Also if Harry hated Draco so much as shown in the order, has anything happened between them during Draco's disguise during the summer? Or the ten days before the New Year eve? I strongly believe you have held up something between the two and would love to find out more when you update...
Lastly, for your other fic of punishing Lucuis, I have read it but...well, I can only give thanks for the punishment, I still need sometime to accomplish it, sure I will review later!
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April 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
YAY! Everytime I tryed to read chapter 15 internet would die and I couldn't read it! UNTIL NOW! And I just read 16. YAY! Slightly ADDish again! wwwwoooooo *dances* okay, but yes, thoroughly enjoyed it! More please! *waits* I want to see what happens next! NOW! *hugs* - Draca
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April 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
YAY!!! I feel loved! Thanks for the credit, and anytime. Yes, I most likely used the Canadian version there...yeh, I suck at French French. *dances wildly for actually helping some what...*shifty eyes* dances more*
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April 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Going back to work in another 20 minutes, must be real quick!
After reading this...I just feel that Snape is a sadist. He has an imperfect life, he is taunted by the great and famous and popular James Potter, later even saved by him (that would be an insult to Snape)! He had greasy hair when he was young, I really pitied him when I read that. He had made a terrible mistake by joining as a Death Eater...but above all, when he realized how f**k up his life was, he was given a chance to correct it...and that was Draco.
Draco was beautiful, powerful, rich and loved, I personally believed that he was everything Snape would love to be - so Snape protected him so much! He was also vulnerable, relied and trusted Snape so much, even more than his own father Lucius...that's why when all added up that would be one protective and possessive Snape and a young helpless Draco...that had truly reflected in the first half of the story. So I totally understood why when Draco returned from that night, Snape would be very angry (as in a parent thinking - how could you be so irresponsible when I was so worrited with you). When Snape had found out what happened to Draco, his reaction would be that dramatic! As Harry long been projected as a mistake in Snape's life, now that mistake had destroyed all Snape's work - Draco's perfect life! So Snape would really be pissed and punished Draco with that evil plan. Even after Lucius death, he really would try his best to...keep a hold on Draco. Maybe I can say...Draco is the only one that Snape is managed to love, and be 'loved/liked/trusted' in return, so he is...in such possessiveness mode.
But what made me fuzzy...if Draco had lead a 'perfect life' that Snape has planned for him (married with Pansy, had a cute son and being a good Lord Malfoy even his wife had lovers), he had no other reason of changing the plan with Spaulding - he tried to focus on Harry as Harry was a mistake that must be punished or even eliminated...what has happened to make Snape change the plan? Maybe when I have more time to read it second time I would find out the answer! Or...would you explain more later?
Lastly I would suggest you to change the escape of Cissa with Snape and Blaise from glamour to polyjuice potion. Azkaban is a heavily guarded place, even nothing detail has been mentioned about it in the JK's series, but generally we had a good guess that in there, no apparation is allowed, every dark spell would be disabled. So glamour wouldn't work there...however, polyjuice potion does work. Basically it changes everything to the polyjuiced person - even with magical signature, finger print and iris...so it would really be more convincing to have that. I believe there must be something left in Hogwarts from Harry for Snape to polyjuice (as Harry is in NY); for Kingsley - sure that would not be a problem...
After reading this...I just feel that Snape is a sadist. He has an imperfect life, he is taunted by the great and famous and popular James Potter, later even saved by him (that would be an insult to Snape)! He had greasy hair when he was young, I really pitied him when I read that. He had made a terrible mistake by joining as a Death Eater...but above all, when he realized how f**k up his life was, he was given a chance to correct it...and that was Draco.
Draco was beautiful, powerful, rich and loved, I personally believed that he was everything Snape would love to be - so Snape protected him so much! He was also vulnerable, relied and trusted Snape so much, even more than his own father Lucius...that's why when all added up that would be one protective and possessive Snape and a young helpless Draco...that had truly reflected in the first half of the story. So I totally understood why when Draco returned from that night, Snape would be very angry (as in a parent thinking - how could you be so irresponsible when I was so worrited with you). When Snape had found out what happened to Draco, his reaction would be that dramatic! As Harry long been projected as a mistake in Snape's life, now that mistake had destroyed all Snape's work - Draco's perfect life! So Snape would really be pissed and punished Draco with that evil plan. Even after Lucius death, he really would try his best to...keep a hold on Draco. Maybe I can say...Draco is the only one that Snape is managed to love, and be 'loved/liked/trusted' in return, so he is...in such possessiveness mode.
But what made me fuzzy...if Draco had lead a 'perfect life' that Snape has planned for him (married with Pansy, had a cute son and being a good Lord Malfoy even his wife had lovers), he had no other reason of changing the plan with Spaulding - he tried to focus on Harry as Harry was a mistake that must be punished or even eliminated...what has happened to make Snape change the plan? Maybe when I have more time to read it second time I would find out the answer! Or...would you explain more later?
Lastly I would suggest you to change the escape of Cissa with Snape and Blaise from glamour to polyjuice potion. Azkaban is a heavily guarded place, even nothing detail has been mentioned about it in the JK's series, but generally we had a good guess that in there, no apparation is allowed, every dark spell would be disabled. So glamour wouldn't work there...however, polyjuice potion does work. Basically it changes everything to the polyjuiced person - even with magical signature, finger print and iris...so it would really be more convincing to have that. I believe there must be something left in Hogwarts from Harry for Snape to polyjuice (as Harry is in NY); for Kingsley - sure that would not be a problem...
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April 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
okay, NOW things are starting to make MORE sense now! lol
Great sewing up chapter, but?
I have a very, very bad feeling that Snape isn't done with Harry just yet. And?
he STILL hasn't made Draco suffer enough.
Also, Narcissa, Pansy and Blaise must be held accountable too.
I also think that Ginny might not be as innocent as she is being made out to be.
Suddenly she just leaves? When she had ALL of this time to do so before?! hmmmm.
Nope, I think our Hero Harry better watch his back, and protect his heart, as well as
his *jewels* and I don't mean his nuts.
great chapter btw ;)
EG
Great sewing up chapter, but?
I have a very, very bad feeling that Snape isn't done with Harry just yet. And?
he STILL hasn't made Draco suffer enough.
Also, Narcissa, Pansy and Blaise must be held accountable too.
I also think that Ginny might not be as innocent as she is being made out to be.
Suddenly she just leaves? When she had ALL of this time to do so before?! hmmmm.
Nope, I think our Hero Harry better watch his back, and protect his heart, as well as
his *jewels* and I don't mean his nuts.
great chapter btw ;)
EG
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April 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Sooo need chapter 17! I'm thinking Severus has several loose screws. What he and Lucius did to Draco and continued to do... makes me want to filet him! Alive!
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April 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Snape is another character I absolutely love to hate...he's a bitter, unforgiving, sniveling coward...he was protecting his own arse here and it wouldn't surprise me on the least if harbored those type of feelings for his godson. A very good chapter, I'm looking forward to see how you wrap all this up in a neatly wrapped packeage.
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April 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Eeh gawd, that was intense. Great chapter, can't wait to see what happens next. Will there be more Parker? And more sex between the two hot gods of Hogwarts? Lol, I hope so. Onto your reply from last review. I am from Edinburgh, (born and bred) and live about 10 minutes away from the castle. Yeah, Edinburgh is beautiful during the festive season, with it's outdoor ice-rink and German markets. It's the only time of the year I venture into the town, lol. I have been to the castle loads of times but mainly for concerts. I'm off to see some Irish sex gods tonight (WESTLIFE, You might have heard of them, living in Ireland) and I seen them two years ago at the Castle. Beautiful surroundings on a perfect summer night, it made me so proud to be from Edinburgh at that moment. Not forgetting JKR though, who I've only ever seen twice in Edinburgh, she keeps a low profile. Anyway, can't wait for the next installment, will be checking for updates every night. Keep up the good work, I am hooked.
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