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...I would doubt the perception of being perfect moment...Harry has moral, and we know about it...

Now I believe Harry needs to learn more about veela and male...or even hormones...

Professor, it's a good story but it needs a little help, with spelling especially on words from canon. There is an excellent site to use if you want to this story to soar higher. I'd also like to suggest you find a beta to help. If you would email me, I'll be happy to give you the website to help with canon. I'd offer to help with the rest, but I'm not a beta, just a critical test reader.

I really do look forward to reading more. I hope my suggestions don't put you off writing. You have a style there that works. Keep going, just double check things, as an example, the Tractile Tarts was one of the things that "jumped up and slapped me". It should have been Treacle Tarts. It's things like this that will cause flamers and hurt feelings and with a little extra work, it's avoidable and then a good story can be enjoyed by all the readers.

Like I said, keep writing, I want to read more of the story.

Hohoho~~~~ a little bit difficulty and challenge makes the outcome and reward more tasteful...use all your magic, charm, power and beauty to woo Harry, Draco - and to start with, showing passion and care is a good idea!

ok guys kiss and make up.

Harrys in so much shit right now it's hillarious! I love this story so much it ingenious!

Honestly, you need a beta! A good idea for a story, but you seriosly need a good beta!

So cute. I love the little thoughts at the ends of the chapters. Can't wait for more! Keep up the great work.

I hope you get the next chapter up. I do like this alot.

I haven't had a chance to read much of this story, but from what I've managed, it looks like it's gonna be awesome. Please keep it up. Also if you still need a Beta, please consider this my request for that position.

Haha...this is really sad for all those sense/smell-driven magical creature! If it is ture that Draco's mate smell like that tart...that would definitely be an advantage to Harry...pls update soon!