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The only idea I have it that you use the end of Pitch Black for the next chapter and then move the story to the sequel Chronicles of Riddick. Like make it that Jack is still Kira but that Riddick and Harry care about her like a daughter that why they are on the run from hunters now and them move on to the prison...then maybe while in prison Riddick takes his vixen, Harry while there... then move on to the rescue of Kira from the enemy... or make the Necromongers the evolution result of what vampires have become in this time (got the idea from another fanfic that is a crossover w/ BtVS) and that Harry real is some type of true leader of them.

Here some ideas, hope it helps some!

this really is one bad ass writers block. if you want Riddick and Harry to get to it fast, Harry is *magical* he can do just about anything,. how about some 'noticec me not' spells to keep the kids at bay?

I'm loving your story, but could you not kill Ali, please?
Also maybe this could develop into an mpreg?
Just an idea, love your writing! Don't stop!

Hey I think your fic is so great. I love it how you found a way for Harry to be pary of Pitch Black and how you still kept the story the same in the movie but with a little twist and an extra play to it. It's fine that you are taking your time in making the fic with somewhat caring the story plot from the movie but if you need any help with anything, I have watch Pitch Black too many times to count but I can help you with how Harry can be involve in the story and give you ideas on anything that you think is good for the fic. Oh and for the vote that you have for the kid Ali, I have read what the reviews are suggesting and I agree that Ali can still stay alive but don't make it so happy dandy. The boy was chewed alive with the small of the creatures so either Harry or Riddick could save the day for him but make it like the boy still being attack by the creatures and survived with multiple bite marks and couple small portions of his arm, the skin off. That why the boy is alive but almost in the process of being eaten alive. That is my idea and all so if you think it's good, go for it if not, not. I just thought that I would give you a couple of ideas for the fic in the future of making yours. Oh and Fry, keep to her part until the end when instead of a courage thing, make it a coward thing. I would say what I mean, but I don't know if any of the reviewer have ever seen PB so I won't spoll it. Though I'm tampted too. Anyway, update soon and take your time.

Ang Avalonis ^_^

P.S. On you last chapter 8, I've notice that the year Harry was asleep for hundreds of years, the number are wrong. He did sleep for over 800 year but not 837, the 3 and 7 are switch. I did the math(which I know you think it's annoy for someone that would do that and all) and I got 873, not 837. I just thought that you should know and all. If you don't want to change it that's fine, I just thought that you don't want to confuss your readers and all. And I know it's a long review but I wanted to say a lot. sorry. Well update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!

hey this story is great just keep going with the plot of pitch black. When in doubt watch the movie again and let your imagination go. Your characters are consistant not erratic. Which is the hardest part of writing I think. I do write but find fanfiction hard to write and am too embarresed to post my stuff. But I love to read harry potter fanfiction. and I love your story. You have great challenges in your profile,. However I have a challenge for you. You write on one of your challeges (I like the hellboy harry kitty one). Its a nice idea and the way the challenge is written you seem to have a lot of good ideas. SO if you write I'll beta it. Just send me an email.

Griffyn

I'm enjoying this so far. I hope you write more of this soon. =]

~B~

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I can't wait to read more this story is wonderful.

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Tigeress

good story, I like it, Ali lives, bye

Don't give up, this story is the best I have read in a while and that is saying something. Good luck with the rest of the story and those annoying plot bunnies!

hey darling, if you are having trouble thinking about writing the next bit, maybe think about whether you wanna just follow the movie and that's it, or did you originally plan for more story after. i know i am writing a fic at home based on a movie, and after establishing the noticable differences, like you have here, i then skipped ahead to after and gave a chapter of flash back/explanation to avoid the tedium of rehashing the whole thing!!! then i could get onto what happened next. that's a good way of working it if you are wondering how to get to a later point. otherwise, whack out pitch black the movie and rewrite the script as you watch. it also do this with movies that i have seen a million times that my hubby makes me watch again and again. i rewrite it in my head and tell my hubby to annoy him. but make some notes and get re-inspired. i would love it if it follows the movie pretty close still, with the exception of Ali cause he is cute in this story, but FRY MUST DIE!! but i would love to know what happens to the two of them after the 'movie' is over, does chronicals of riddick happen with the necromongers? or do they go off somewhere else?? i always want to know what happens next!!!!!! but i love what you have done with this sooo much, i think this is in my top five favourite harry fics at the moment, so i am panting for a new chapter, but definetely prepared to wait for an update as it is a fantastic story!!!! so you go girl, let the muses tickle you with long pink feathers, may the purple plot bunnies waggle their fluffy tails at you, may the inspiration pixies batter you over the head with their glitter wands!!!! and i shall be waiting and anticipating!!! email me if you are really really stuck for ideas. me always willing to help if it gets me quality fiction!!!
good luck hon!