schedule
July 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapters 9-10:
I checked your story all the time for several days, and nothing. Now I've come back to it and suddenly I'm way behind again. (Rolls up sleeves and gets started reviewing...)
I thought Draco sounded very logical and convincing defending Hermione. Good for him, even though her novel messed up his life. Maybe her next one will get his wife back for him. And it's so transparent to Hermione what Snape really wants her to do in that potions storeroom. What is funny is it really wasn't transparent to Snape. He thought it was lust. Poor sod. His discovery he's in love puts him on the defensive and her in the driver's seat - if she finds out. (Rubs hand together with glee) chapters of lovelorn Snape trying to hide it. Yummy.
OMG, Snape getting advice on courtship from Arthur. I can't think of two more disparate men. Did Snape expect Arthur to find him a way to win Hermione and sweep his wrongheaded behavior under a rug never to be thought of again? Slytherins are so good at shedding blame.
Oh, dear, I don't think Dumbledore should quit his Headmaster job and try matchmaking, do you? He's remarkably clumsy at it. Most of the mess stems from his interference. Bad Dumbledore (he's just added another brick in that road paved with good intentions...) Severus and Veritaserum. What a disastrous combination with the firewhiskey. He's blatting his every last thought. Of course they''re all the same. "I love you." Well, good for him! 8-)
I checked your story all the time for several days, and nothing. Now I've come back to it and suddenly I'm way behind again. (Rolls up sleeves and gets started reviewing...)
I thought Draco sounded very logical and convincing defending Hermione. Good for him, even though her novel messed up his life. Maybe her next one will get his wife back for him. And it's so transparent to Hermione what Snape really wants her to do in that potions storeroom. What is funny is it really wasn't transparent to Snape. He thought it was lust. Poor sod. His discovery he's in love puts him on the defensive and her in the driver's seat - if she finds out. (Rubs hand together with glee) chapters of lovelorn Snape trying to hide it. Yummy.
OMG, Snape getting advice on courtship from Arthur. I can't think of two more disparate men. Did Snape expect Arthur to find him a way to win Hermione and sweep his wrongheaded behavior under a rug never to be thought of again? Slytherins are so good at shedding blame.
Oh, dear, I don't think Dumbledore should quit his Headmaster job and try matchmaking, do you? He's remarkably clumsy at it. Most of the mess stems from his interference. Bad Dumbledore (he's just added another brick in that road paved with good intentions...) Severus and Veritaserum. What a disastrous combination with the firewhiskey. He's blatting his every last thought. Of course they''re all the same. "I love you." Well, good for him! 8-)
schedule
July 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapters 11-12:
Well, we almost got Hermione talking with Snape. Somehow Malfoys always seem to intrude, even innocent ones. Draco - a father of twins. It boggles the mind. Those pregnancy and postpartum hormones are pretty powerful. I assume Hermione has now met all of Draco's requirements.
I think Percy should be 'fixed'. His Weasley genes are obviously defective and it would be better for the mutation to die with him.
Oh, oh, look out - Dumbledore's license to matchmake must not have been revoked. He's trying it again. I hope it works this time. He's pulled Minerva into his machinations. Maybe she won't make such a hash of it.
If you want something done right do it yourself. Well, that finally became Hermione's motto, I see, and just in time too. I think Hermione Snape sounds quite nice! (Maybe I'm getting ahead of myself here...)
Lovely story, believable characters and a shag - finally. Marvelous!
__________________________________
Note: One adjustment you might want to make in Ch. 12 to avoid confusion:
"He flicked the tip with her tongue and felt her shudder." It should be HIS tongue I think. I know if I was getting that from Severus I'd want it to be HIS tongue.
Well, we almost got Hermione talking with Snape. Somehow Malfoys always seem to intrude, even innocent ones. Draco - a father of twins. It boggles the mind. Those pregnancy and postpartum hormones are pretty powerful. I assume Hermione has now met all of Draco's requirements.
I think Percy should be 'fixed'. His Weasley genes are obviously defective and it would be better for the mutation to die with him.
Oh, oh, look out - Dumbledore's license to matchmake must not have been revoked. He's trying it again. I hope it works this time. He's pulled Minerva into his machinations. Maybe she won't make such a hash of it.
If you want something done right do it yourself. Well, that finally became Hermione's motto, I see, and just in time too. I think Hermione Snape sounds quite nice! (Maybe I'm getting ahead of myself here...)
Lovely story, believable characters and a shag - finally. Marvelous!
__________________________________
Note: One adjustment you might want to make in Ch. 12 to avoid confusion:
"He flicked the tip with her tongue and felt her shudder." It should be HIS tongue I think. I know if I was getting that from Severus I'd want it to be HIS tongue.
schedule
July 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ok, so i found one tiny little grammar mistake:
"He'd never been any good at interpersonal relationships."
it is actually intrapersonal relationships unless your talking about him talking to himself. easy to do, but there you go.
I can't wait for the next chapter.
Andy
"He'd never been any good at interpersonal relationships."
it is actually intrapersonal relationships unless your talking about him talking to himself. easy to do, but there you go.
I can't wait for the next chapter.
Andy
schedule
July 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hay i loved it it got me going hury with the nexed chaptr thow
schedule
July 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey! 11 was terrific. Very evil cliffy so looking forward to getting on the 12. Nice working on fixing poor Draco in Pansy's eyes. But Hagrid patting her knee kind of squicked me! LOL. Great work, now for 12.
schedule
July 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awwww, hot smut, always nice. Yes, clearly they have issues. Minerva had me laughing in this chapter. Well done again!
schedule
July 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like it. Please update soon.
schedule
July 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
@11. cool you updated love the chapter. update soon
*DB*
*DB*
schedule
July 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
@11. cool you updated love the chapter. update soon
*DB*
*DB*
schedule
July 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
darn it. i HATE cliffhangers. now you REALLY REALLY need to update and quickly would be best. ;)