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Hmm... Interesting.
I liked the ending line "would he take advantage of her now?". It shows Snape questioning/fighting his dark/light side.
Just a couple of things:
I noticed that you used a Hyphen incorrectly a couple of times. When you want to turn two words into one word you use it like this: Car-Wash
But when you want to put a hyphen in the middle of a sentence you need spaces like this: Blah blah blah - blah blah blah.
Also, be careful of your verb tense usage. Since your story is in past tense, just make sure that it stays consistant (I think I noticed a little flub of this somewhere).
Anyway, Keep on truckin'!

well, well, well, what will happen now i do hope that you have lots, and lots more well i will be waiting! :)

damn that lucky hermione..

i would love to be severus' pet..
now, that would be a dream come true


the story is amazing, can't wait for more!

wow ... sev is getting his dream come true ... please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more .. later for now

angel

I love these types of stories there aren't enough!

Interesting start, i'd definitely like to read more. One small correction, the spell is "Crucio", not "crutio" as you have it. i know it's nit-picky but i fogured you might be intersted anyway.

Can't wait to read more!

Good beginning, looking forward to the next chapter. :)

wow that was a great start ... please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more .. later for now

angel