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I have another objection to this fanfic. Why, when Hermione has a perfectly leginitimate reason to be mad at Severus, would anyone in their right mind defend him? I mean, he basically has mindblowing sex with her, tells her coldly to get dressed because his mother\'s coming, and then forces her out of his room. Next he jumps all over her for a minor statement, calls her a whore, does not apologize for it, makes her promise never to have his children, and doesn\'t show her any obvious affection in front of his family. This is followed by her overhearing a conversation with him telling his mother that he\'ll never marry her and that he doesn\'t see their relationship lasting. This is a very, very straightforward conversation. There really is no room for misinterpretation; there is only room for motives. Perhaps he was talking about him being unworthy, but it is still insulting to her any way you look at it. (He\'s worthy enough to sleep with her but not worthy enough to marry her?)

The scene with her friends felt utterly fake. I can understand Draco defending him, but no one else should have even considered his point of view on the information she gave them. They accused her of being childish for not wanting to speak to the man that had broken her heart moments ago by basically treating her like he was ashamed of her, like she was his dirty secret. He never did tell her about his inability to concieve children and he has let her have the wrong impression throughout the whole scene. He then implies that her eavesdropping and the resulting anger is somehow wrong, when he spent the entire first part of the fanfiction eavesdropping and being jealous of her friendship with Sirius. After she told her friends she was pregnant this should have garnered more sympathy, but their reaction was a confusing barrage of emotions that seemed utterly misplaced.

And the major thing I object to is Hermione\'s reaction to all of this. If a man had treated me that way, and if I weren\'t a weak person as Hermione isn\'t, then I would be angry. No, angry is too weak of a word. I would be manaically enraged. I would be so insanely mad at him that I would yell at him for a solid month. The man treated her abominably. He talked down to her, deliberately misled her, and treated her like a shameful afterthought. He never justified himself, never explained his emotions or reactions to her, and expected her to just \'know\' magically, I guess, why he acted the way he did. He held by turn ridiculously high and ridiculously low opinions on the continuation of their relationship. I would have started screaming at him the first time anything like this happened and left him the second time. Even if Hermione is reading him wrong, it is still his fault for not correcting her or explaining. Any way you look at it, this entire thing can be laid at his doorstep.

~Your Worshipfulness

P.S. These two chapters have sent your rating down to a 3 out of a possible 10. Sry.

Oh god, you had me crying for the last few chapters... *g* evil you, my nose is already clogged by the cold I have...

Unbelievable. Absolutely amazing story. I read it in one sitting, which means I am definitely now up way past my bedtime. Oh well. I don\'t have to get up tomorrow. Anyway. I thought Severus and Hermione were perfectly in character, loved Harry and Draco and Ginny and Sirius and Severus\' family and just about everyone. I especially thought that the various ways they managed to screw up their relationship with each other were both original and totally realistic. It seems to me that if that situation were to occur, the way you\'ve written it is exactly how they would react, which just goes to show what an incredible grasp of both human nature and characterization you have. Well done.

I\'ve just finished the first chapter and already I\'m in love! It\'s well-written, and though I\'ve seen similar plots your direction is refreshing. Well done.

Hey, wow! This is great so far! How old are you? You must be a genius or an older fan or both because that was AWESOME!

(finally sits back in chair)

Wow. And holy wow.

That was an amazing ride. I enjoyed thmmenmmensly from start to finish. My favorite scenes were the Raven Mail (wonderfully light and teasing mood, btw) and the opening of the Valentine. The Valentine scene was so vivid I felt as if I saw the whole event happen. You are truly a credit to writing. Now I'm off to read the story you hinted at in the last chapter.

Thanks!
SZ

Just finished reading "Still The One" and think it's fantastic and I am very pleased to see that you are writting another story. You are an excellent writter and I am looking foreward to reading more of your stories. If you are interested I can recommend some stories for you to read.

Yours sincerely

Jen

Great fic. I put it in my \"To Read Again\" folder. Thanks for writing it.

Whooo! Whooo! Whooooooo! Stop! *Spinning around stunned and confused. Just flung unprepared through time waLandLanding badly, stumbles and shakes head searching for missing pieces of ones life* How did I end up here?! Last thing I remember my Incredible Goddess of Smut was hurtling me towards huge orgasmic Severus and Hermione make up orgy....ok....has it been months, weeks or minutes since my last memory of watching Hermione run out of the great hall?.......I\'m in the front row of a very satisfying wedding. The honeymoon all a twisted mind with secret wishes to kiss the teacher, you know where, could want. But....the make up sex! Where was the make up sex and stuff like....like....oh I don\'t know.....maybe Severus bursting into tears of joy or something? That\'s the Smut Goddesse\'s job to decide. I\'m just a lowly follower going where she leads me for 8 hours on a sunny Saturday without even throwing in a load of laundry, and not a clean pair of under ware to my name! Nor my husband\'s name for that matter. I even skipped being indignant at my 17 year old daughter for leaving without charging the cell phone and not telling me what time she intends to find a ride home, for heaven sakes! (I know where she\'s suppose to be; so I suppose if she doesn\'t phone soon I\'ll have to hunt her down. shit! She better be there!......Lucky for her she just walked in.)
I love you Smut Goddess. Please take no offence. I loved the ending. It just happened aoo foo fast for my puny brain to take in. (*panting*) Last night I was sorely disapointed when Johnny Dep and Antonio Banderas didn\'t do one sexy thing in their whole stupid \"Once Upon A Time In Mexico\" flick. Got a migraine but stayed up to watch the damned movie for nothing and went to bed with a headache. You were so much more satisfying! Just missed the make up sex in the garden when she tells him yes, that\'s all. (*sigh*) You still rule and I loved your story! Now I\'d better go wash some under ware. I can throw it in the dryer in the morning.

love, breastlady

What can I say? What do I need to say besides that it is now 6:47am in the morning herd I d I do, indeed, need to be up in about 2 hours and should have been asleep a looong time ago but was too much in the grips of your story? It\'s fab! Thank you so much for writing it! Even though they should just have talked more, now and again... . :-))