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Okay, so this wasn\'t the best Severus/Hermione I have ever read, mainly because you tend to make typos that wouldn\'t be picked up by an ordinary MSWord, or other Word Processing program (such as then and than, its and it\'s, there and they\'re and their) - your beta really should look to that. I don\'t mean it as a flame, (if fact, if you need a second opinion I\'d be happy to give it a read) but you also need to work a bit on your grammar. Apart from that (which made the story kind of hard to read for me, purely because I am a grammar Nazi) this wasn\'t half bad. You have a defined wit - especially in the Raven-Mail scene - that actually makes me laugh, you have a feel for both characters (although I\'m despising your!Sirius, gr, swanky smarmy bastard that he is) and a nice hand with writing smut (as long as you don\'t use the words \"throbbing manpole\" in anything other than a mocking way, you\'re set for a career in Mills and Boon). However, I find myself wondering about (and wishing for) the ending promised in the fic summary. An ending at the end? Not a one in sight. It irritates, because your teasers, oh how they tease, and your plot is developing nicely - albeit streotypically of most SS/HG fics you can find around the sites these days. I know you\'ll take a while in uptading, as you mentioned, however keep in mind you\'re a WiP - I don\'t usually read those so I\'m feeling rather nasty after being cut off abruptly, mid story. To conclude - great story, can\'t wait for an update (email me?) hope everything went well, and thankyou for making me smile. Alan Rickman all the way *licks lips* ~Greenie

Excellente\'! You bring smooth transitions and good phraseology. Syntax is good-would like to point out the difference in the words then and than. That was THEN~ in relationship to time, or clausal relashipships. Another example: I would rather read your fic THAN write my own. Unless of course it\'s different in your country, btw, is it?
Good luck on your project, and keep posting. I have enjoyed reading it thus far. L.Evans

Please, for the love of God, get them together. I\'m dying, here!

Seriously, though, wonderful as usual. Ct wat wait for the next chapter, yadda yadda, all the same things I always say.

Aranel

Hysterical stuff, I just loved the line \"Good evening you complete lush\". The preview looks promising as well, I mean dancing means being close and being close means touching and you know where that can lead!!!!!!!! (I fervently hope) Good luck with your show, I hope everything goes well for you.

Ok I understand about your goals but I would really love to see more. Just whenever you have the time but asap :) . I live for your chapters.

Bravo, again! Another lovely chapter. You\'re welcome to the goldfish line, I just hope you put it in a story. I look forward to seeing it. Good luck with your project, dearie! We\'re all eagerly awaiting the next chappie...

Hello darling I am QUESTIONMARK**. I was amazed to see that I had not given you a review I swore I had all ready. Well any ways I am really fond of your story to say the least. Very cute and I must say I would like to thank you and snapes flower you 2 made me fall crazy in love with snape!! I also love your writing style it is very good except I didn

hehehehee And no I\'m not going to mattress dance with you... lol I almost fell off my chair.. I like the way this story is going so far.. please keep up the wonderful story!!!

\"Good evening you complete lush\" hee hee!! I am so gonna use that on my husband! I used to be a barmaid and now I wish I still was so I could be an \"angel for the drunken\" such a cool title. I am going to Greece tomorow for a weeks (well deserved!) holiday and I just thought wouldn\'t it be nice to come home to a shiny new chapter of \"Still the one\" hint hint!! Only joking, it looks like you have a lot on your plate at the moment so I wish you good luck at your show and I hope you make shitloads of money!!
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P.S Thanks for letting us know about a possible delay in posts a lot of authors don\'t and you are just left with half a story and no idea whats happened.So big *hugs* from me

Okay that chapter 11 is the worst tease ever!!! This story is excellent, and it\'s so cute. Snape with a soft side is just adorable. I cannot wait for more!! Please - please update ASAP!!!