rate_review Reviews

I think that your third chapter is the best one yet. Draco's perspective is always hard to write from because the books never give you much information about his character except for the Draco-bashing that Harry, Ron, and often Hermione always give him (which is usually much warrented). However, you really nailed this one. The third chapter is very enlightening as to what is going on with Draco, and it makes the whole plot a lot easier to understand. My personal opinion is that your description of Narcissa is very accurate, and much more realistic. I do have to ask, though, does this plot end up with Draco and Hermione together, or is it an amicable (or not amicable) parting of ways?
Keep those wonderful installments coming! I can't wait to read the next one as you always leave us wanting more!
-Helen

Wow awesome job! I love the easy flow you have when you write. I wish I could do that. Please update soon.

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lol..you did ask...

major hottness in this chappie! great for chilly evenings! Skye

I've read your first two chapters and I have to say...well done!!
But how can Malfoy just drop the news on her like he is commenting on the weather or something. Plain evil, that is.
How I love your second chapter. Yes, with all the cliche's out of the way, it's better. Realistic! But Malfoy still get's to be damn handsome and that's fine by me, haha.
I just hate (and secretly love) the fact that Malfoy is so business-like and seemes so collected. Damn him. You write very well.

DJ

more,more,more please. very good story. keep up the good work. love to hate draco.update soon please.

Oh, yes! That was worth it alright! Loved it!

That chapter was great! I loved the ending!

I love this story already please update soon it's good,

Loved the cliche-bashing!yee gads but that was funny! oh...the rest of the chater was great too! Skye

Hahahahahahahaha! I'm still giggling from that chapter because of all your digs at the cliches. The internal monologue summed up most D/H stories I've read, and while I have nothing against them, it's always awesome to watch a good writer pick at the motifs. It's like watching Mel Brooks poke at classics like Frankenstein and Dracula. I enjoy the original (cliched or not) and adore the parody.

I think your characterization is impeccable. You nailed Hermione's slight OCD with her scrutiny of Draco and the questions buzzing in her brain (well, her OCD and any normal girl thrown off balance by a cute boy). I'm a huge fan of SnowflakeImp and your story feels like the D/H hers could have been in 7th year. Speaking of could have been, you missed a cliche - what happened to the war? :)

My only negative is this - Draco seems almost too calm. Granted, there has been no external characters other than a brief mention of Ron in this last chapter. Fan writers always go against canon (yay!), but there are times where your Draco is too perfect in his smirky arrogance.

By the way, awesome technique turning a lame cliche into a giggle-inducing question: "How can a smirk make a sound?" This internal monologue has me craving more!

(Yeah, I'm a 23-year old high school English teacher. I need my fic fix, but I do apologize for the lengthy reviews if you ever tire of them. :))