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by TomFeltonIsKindaHot

schedule February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like the second chapter. The paragraph in the first chapter where he refers to his eyes as penetrating and calls himself a Slytherin Sex God really bugs me though. Maybe that could be toned down a little? A little less cliche-y?
person jaycee
schedule February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
oh my lord!

nice cliffy to throw in there...keep up the good work!
person Pyroette
schedule February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
More! Please, pretty please? *wibbles* I'm sorry I don't have anything more constructive to say, as all I can think at the moment is MORE PLEASE. But in a much more respectful and polite manner.
person DarkLady
schedule February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*laughs and falls over* ohh good gods that was great! btw the GE archive is back up so you can update again *winks* I think my favourite part of that chapter was of course Harry walking in on them almost shagging *snickers* poor old potter
person amoraluv
schedule February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Shit!!! thats what I basicly exclaimed when I read the ending of ch. 11. Man this story is totally hot I can't wait for what happens next.
person tikigirl
schedule February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Damn, It's just like Harry to check on her because of that migrane! I can't wait to read the reaction! I hope she's not in love with Harry!
schedule February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wicked. Just plain wicked!!!
I love your story!! How much drama can one endure..haha.
I'll be watching for your next chapter. UPDATE SOON, for everyone's mental health.

DJ
person Rosamund
schedule February 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ha-ha! But how did Harry get in? Hilarious. Can't wait for the explanations!
person Chihiro
schedule February 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
UPDATE!!!!KLA;DFJADF
schedule February 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
oh now that is just a fucking brilliant ending to the chapter.