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July 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
can I say you've got a talent for descriptive writing? I love your dialogue, and the way you can make the characters and the setting come alive for the reader. well done!
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July 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hello!
so, great chapter! I always love Draco's point of view, and you do it beautifully. I can definitely see two separate personalities.
Anyways, there are some slight typos here and there. In some places, the "the" is spelled as "they" and in the last sentence I believe you mean "very" instead of "every"
otherwise, i loved their first time togther. Not nice and sweet, which is good since I don't picture their relationship as nice and sweet.
so, great chapter! I always love Draco's point of view, and you do it beautifully. I can definitely see two separate personalities.
Anyways, there are some slight typos here and there. In some places, the "the" is spelled as "they" and in the last sentence I believe you mean "very" instead of "every"
otherwise, i loved their first time togther. Not nice and sweet, which is good since I don't picture their relationship as nice and sweet.
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July 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
holy bloody hell... i hate blaise. sorry 'bout that.. and hate is a strong word... but i hate him.. and I'm so absolutely THRILLED Hermione isn't too keen on him either. I just finished reading chapter fourteen... oh dear! i haven't stopped reading since chapter one, except for a little snack break earlier... :]
fantastic job! and can I say how absolutely heartwrenching it was for me to read Hermione and Draco's break-up? I felt like a three year old being denied her toys and candy, if that makes sense. and I've noticed something, your writing has improved!
I still can't get over Blaise.. that conniving little bastard! excuse my language!! I'm usually not so bold, but eeeek! and sometimes I wish Draco would be soft and romantic, just a bit... but I realize that then, Draco wouldn't be the Malfoy we all know and love (in the story, at least). :] your writing makes me supremely happy and giddy.
fantastic job! and can I say how absolutely heartwrenching it was for me to read Hermione and Draco's break-up? I felt like a three year old being denied her toys and candy, if that makes sense. and I've noticed something, your writing has improved!
I still can't get over Blaise.. that conniving little bastard! excuse my language!! I'm usually not so bold, but eeeek! and sometimes I wish Draco would be soft and romantic, just a bit... but I realize that then, Draco wouldn't be the Malfoy we all know and love (in the story, at least). :] your writing makes me supremely happy and giddy.
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July 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
stupid Harry and STUPID BLOODY BLAISE... sorry 'bout that little tantrum right there!.... i don't like him one bit.. don't know why Draco was friends with him in the first bit...
but that was an excellent cliff hanger.. doesn't mean I like it xD but an excellent way to end the chapter, if i do say so myself.
and I was thinking.. if Draco and Hermione do end up together.. I was thinking they'd cry each other's first name out in the throes of passion instead of their last names... as a way to show their dedication (couldn't think of another word) to each other...
ooh, and I'd love email update alerts. That'd be absolutely lovely :] my email is xbluefairyx@yahoo.com
good luck writing the next chappie! can't wait to read more!!!
but that was an excellent cliff hanger.. doesn't mean I like it xD but an excellent way to end the chapter, if i do say so myself.
and I was thinking.. if Draco and Hermione do end up together.. I was thinking they'd cry each other's first name out in the throes of passion instead of their last names... as a way to show their dedication (couldn't think of another word) to each other...
ooh, and I'd love email update alerts. That'd be absolutely lovely :] my email is xbluefairyx@yahoo.com
good luck writing the next chappie! can't wait to read more!!!
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July 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
plz plz plz email me wen u update i love u story you are a very good andt talented riterrr i love this story pl update soon how manii more chapters have u got to go
ur a leagen cant wait jess
ur a leagen cant wait jess
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July 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
fantastic! when is the next update?
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July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i love it when u update!!
although ive been a fan since the first paragraph,i've noticed your writing has gotten even better! Draco's little nuances (every character actually) bring so much more color to your story. can't ait for more...email please!!!
-tiffany (starkid7896@aol.com)
although ive been a fan since the first paragraph,i've noticed your writing has gotten even better! Draco's little nuances (every character actually) bring so much more color to your story. can't ait for more...email please!!!
-tiffany (starkid7896@aol.com)
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July 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Update soon! please please please *sobs.
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July 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
AHHHHHH!!!!!! It is normally hard for me to keep up with stories over time, but this one is sooooo good. This part...
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July 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Blaise... WTF? poor Draco can't catch a break... no thanks to dick head Harry