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October 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
WOW...I just found this..and i thought it was wonderful. Harry opening up to Sev through song...Beautiful...i teared up some
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July 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
please update!!!!!!!!!
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January 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
checking reviews-thanks to everyone
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January 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This story is lovely. I hope you up date soon.
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January 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
interessting beginning, hope you update soon
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January 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i have no idea how else to look at my review so im gonna have to post here. thanks to the 3 reviewers i already have
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January 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
do i really have harrys eyebrows sneering? *must read work* and i do use updated spelling and grammar check and haven't found anything. characterisation wise it's just an easy read-not trying to be great literature. thanks to all reviewers, will update tomorrow.
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January 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
good story
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January 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh dear! That must have been an awful spell that turned Snape into a vapid 13 year old girl for the duration of this story! The poor man - losing all dignity, personality and intelligence this way...
You should really invest in several betas for spelling, grammar and general writing, even leaving aside the matter of IC-characterization. Paragraphs and punctuation are also your friends and even more your readers!
You often use words wrongly and totally out of context. For instance: "sneer" which you have Harry's eyebrows (!) doing which is impossible since "to sneer" means "a derisive smile or remark" and eyebrows can neither smile nor say something... There are lots of mistakes like this.
You should really invest in several betas for spelling, grammar and general writing, even leaving aside the matter of IC-characterization. Paragraphs and punctuation are also your friends and even more your readers!
You often use words wrongly and totally out of context. For instance: "sneer" which you have Harry's eyebrows (!) doing which is impossible since "to sneer" means "a derisive smile or remark" and eyebrows can neither smile nor say something... There are lots of mistakes like this.