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You mentioned in the beginning, that you didn't consider this story original. But I must say that this is the first fanfic with Harry as an un-blackmailed servant to Severus, that I've read, or found. I realy like it, exept for the fact that you let their attractions towards eachother be to obvius for them. I want it to hang in the thread a little bit longer. But if you feel that it would slow your wrightingtempo down, then I won't complain.
I don't think that you chould let Severus know about Harry this early thoug. It is something that will be a little bit to critical this early in the story, let them have lots and lots of bonding and sex first. However, if you, at this stage, feel that you are not capabale ((?) This place dosen't have any spellcorection) or prevented to continue, or perhaps just want to se the diffrence, I would very much appreciate to steal your concept. This I will not do with out your expersed consede, (is that realy another word for "Agreeing"?, it seems a bit... of.) That dosen't mean that I don't have any confidence in your wrigthing, just that I'm realy conserned that, since you're taking so long, you won't continue. And I realy want you to.
This is best answerd ((?)spelling) with the next Chapter. Cross my fingers for a Very quick answer...

Definitely good, you need to update it.

Ahh!!! Finish!!! I love it. Of course he's Potter and there will inevitably be some sort of incident where Sev will find out that he is indeed Harry and then hopefully lots of smut will ensue but I can't wait!! I like the story line a lot.

That was a great first chapter!! I really enjoyed it! Please let me know when you update!

I like your story. It's a diffrent take on the HP/SS stories I've read before please continue writting.

ahhh i like write more

Hi, I have a little of that constructive criticism. Where is the rest? Please update.
Otherwise I'm just curious as to how Lucius knew about Harry.

Well.. We'll see. Thanks and please update

I'm very intrigued and I can't wait to see what you do with this fic. I hope you update soon!

very nice. I look forwaed to the second chapter.

I'm guessing harry is using a very strong glamour for his hair then? Or has he used peroxide? I look forward to the next chapter of this, well done!