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January 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow that was great i love to ... please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more ... later for now
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January 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i hope you have hermione and severus only make love to each other and not have anyone else touch them. this is good story for your frist on this site.
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January 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love MLC fics and this one promises to be a good one - bit of a cliffie there at the end of ch. 2 with Lucius showing up like that! I look forward to reading more.
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January 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I only got one thing to say:
MORE!
MORE!
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January 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love all stories about Marriage Law !!! Please...write more !!! :-)))
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January 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This has an interesting start, although I don't see what's wrong with Lucius petitioning for her... this sounds cool though, I hope we get to see a bit of LM/HG as well though.
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January 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like it please update soon,
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January 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Thank You :) :) :) Love MLC's!!!! You've started off on a different angle, hope to see more chapters up soon.
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January 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Not a bad start, even if this is a well worn story line. Just a bit of criticism. For most readers of Fan Fiction, canon spelling is important. If you are using a spell check feature with auto correct, it will often make changes you don't want. For instance - Lucius Malfoy - you have spelt Lucius as Luscious. Now I agree he is quite Luscious to look at in the movies, it's not his name. One other mistake was descent instead of decent.
Not flaming you - just suggestions to improve your good writing.
Not flaming you - just suggestions to improve your good writing.